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Cutting Deep


Author: MyKemicalfailur
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Another one of my older poems. I really need to start writing again....Sorry for any typos there may be.....I made a picture thing to go with it when I wrote it...but I don't know how to put it in cuz it says the...Http:// thing....I dunno what that is....cuz it aint on an internet page....


Cutting Deep



Cutting deep
Letting the problems pour out
I fall in a heap
Staining the carpet, mother will shout

The deeper the knife
More problems escape
The better my life
This life I hate

Nobody knows
Why would they care
I let the marks show
Expose them to the air

I live my life
From day to day
Just me and my knife
No one else ever stays




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  "just me and my knife, no one else ever stays"

that line hit me somewhere...I cant even explain how it made me feel....but I think you already know!
| Posted on 2006-04-03 00:00:00 | by sugargirlplur | [ Reply to This ]
  Whoa!This is an all around great poem.I luv it.Its exactly how i fell i really love this part of the poem:

Cutting deep,
letting the problems pour out


and also this:

The better the knife,
the more problems escape
The better my life,
This life i hate.

I can really reate to this poem.Great job!
| Posted on 2006-01-13 00:00:00 | by suicidal_chick | [ Reply to This ]
  i don't want to coppy Krazy, but the sames goes. ii can rellay realter to the part..
"
Nobody knows
Why would they care
I let the marks show
Expose them to the air

I live my life
From day to day
Just me and my knife
No one else ever stays"


it's just all around a great poem, you should PM me if you write any more cutting poems,

I have stopped for 6 months and just reading / wrightin makes it so much easier.

Can you give me some feedback on my poem WHO DO I TURN TO?... it's my fav poem, and i want to imporve on it.
| Posted on 2005-07-04 00:00:00 | by OrangeWithWhite | [ Reply to This ]
  I can defenitly relate. It amazes me that i can find so many articles on cutting here, i dont think ive been anywhere else where people can openly express themselves and not be ashamed of their outlet. Self mutilation isnt hid in some dark corner, you and many others have brought it into the open. Thank you for this poem.
| Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by Ann | [ Reply to This ]
  I have a friend that cuts, and I've never really understood why... this poem really helps to get a feel for why cutting would seem to ease life's travails. I suppose it's not much different than other self destructive outlets for such pain... overeating, promiscuity, drugs, etc. Thanks for the enlightenment.
| Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by jer | [ Reply to This ]
  this is good, i liked it, ive felt like that toolike no one cares and all you have is that knife or scissors, but yea , i liked it
| Posted on 2005-02-25 00:00:00 | by whatever14 | [ Reply to This ]
  I can relate a LOT...though the rhyming in the 2nd stanza is a bit sketchy ...Overall, very powerful and wonderful imagery. Very nice!

Sarah
| Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by Deadly Sauce | [ Reply to This ]
  I can relate, I actually have a poem quite similar to this one. Watching the liquid slowly flow away seems to help take the pain away. After a while you are numb to the bite of the blade. Very good write. I hope you start writing again, you have talent, and It helps with the pain as well, I have noticed. Bonnie
| Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by Krazy | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem was very depressing but it was awesome! i could relate to it very well! I feel like tat to! i hope you start writing again!
| Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
  I can relate :) Hahah. I like this poem, it sort of just gets straight to the point, which makes it easier to read and understand. ^.> Some people take so frickin long to get to their point. I'm a cutter too, so yeth, I had to read this poem of yours. It's pretty good. You've got potential, so keep it up, hun :)
| Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by GiveMeTheGun | [ Reply to This ]


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