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    dots Submission Name: Slip On The Icedots

    Author: Cigarette Smoke
    ASL Info:    15/female/A head lake
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 393/470/154
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       Haha it is FREEZING here. FREEZING! I am so cold. my dad took the heat away.

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    dotsSlip On The Icedots

    Slip on the ice once more
    Slide down the hill all the way to the bottom.
    Breathe in the fumes of cleaner
    And fall into my arms.

    Iím waiting right here
    Crouching down in the bushes waiting.
    Iím shivering with cold, I canít take it anymore
    I need to find a place with fire and love.

    You have snow in your hair
    And a smile on your chapped lips.
    Place a kiss on mine, equally chapped
    And quaking in fear.

    Slip on the ice and slide down to me
    Iíll catch you as the snow falls around us.
    Then we can find a place, warm and sweet to us
    And kiss each other with out chapped lips.

    Slip on the ice once moreÖ

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      and if in the eyes of diminishment, i see a fading photograph
    riding in the luminous colors, drowning in the epitaph
    through the transparency, we all will stumble forth
    but in a sense so general, its like from philadelphia to perth.

    in greatness and in modesty, i will abide, good 'un!
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by serpentarius | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem i find just extremely sweet, the winter to me has always been one of the most romantic periods of the year, i just like the atmosphere at this time..sometimes the cold can provide a clarity to the things around us,like the stars on a wintersnight or the bare branches of a tree, all seem more defined...i like your poem, i have always imagined snuggling up to someone in a log cabin with a log fire...thanks for the thoughts..
    | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by riverseo | [ Reply to This ]
      This is sweet, like riverseo said. Really darn good for your age. Don't you hate that? Well I said it. But "breathe in the fumes of cleaner"? Are you huffing or what? 'Cause if you are, then stop! Well, I know you hate this, but keep writing, you seem talented.
    | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]

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