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    dots Submission Name: Beautiful Peopledots
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    Author: riverseo
    ASL Info:    18/Male/Belfast
    Elite Ratio:    4.17 - 24/34/13
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1161
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1055



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       This was the very first poem i wrote when i began back in June last year...and well its again anothertake on how weput people down who really are the most brilliant among us..


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    dotsBeautiful Peopledots
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    Beauty is worshipped and admired,
    Shallow faces adulated en masse.
    The media glare corrupts its face
    Helens lost to the pit of time.

    Who are the beautiful people?
    Not vain queens with gilded mirrors,
    But those who search for deeper truths,
    Those who care and love in tandem.

    The artistic talents of the world
    Creating a compelling vision,
    Of a life of song, hope and dreams;
    Immortals among juveniles.

    Eternal youth they have discovered,
    Moulding life with delicate hands,
    Understanding others in need,
    Disregarding their deep desires.

    Sadly we mistreat these saviours,
    Ignoring their right to exist,
    Making it hard for them to be;
    A conflict they struggle to win.

    So for us the little, weak people
    Must support these Heaven sent gifts,
    Rather than leaving them to die;
    The light of life embodied.

    What is more beautiful than that?




    Submitted on 2005-01-05 19:38:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice um sediment i agree with what your saying but the presentation..... blah. just bland and boring. You can say you like chicken but if it has no seasoning then it tastes like [censored]. no offense. but u said this was your first write so i will say that it was a very good first effort.
    | Posted on 2005-01-05 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]


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