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    dots Submission Name: The Girl Who Stole the Starsdots
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    Author: Paconess1006
    ASL Info:    16/M/Charlotte, NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 99/126/46
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 369
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    Description:
       I wrote this based off of a song i heard on this game I have. Basically this girl a lonely, theif of sorts lives out a life of pain until she is saved by her hero, which is also the protagonist of the game. I chose to use her sad song, which I would love for you all to listen to while you read it, i think it'll make more sense with it. Well if you want the song I can email it to you or something... Read on...


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    dotsThe Girl Who Stole the Starsdots
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    Alone she sits on her mountain high
    pressed for space against the sky
    family taken, all she's known
    burned down to the ground
    an orphanage alone.

    * * *

    Saved by her mysterious captor
    who knew her entire life's story by memory.
    Trying to be who she remembers to be
    Sparking her mind quizzically
    away from endless dreaming.

    She stole a star
    from the dark and gloomy sky.
    Loved it as her very own
    captured it its very own case,
    draped about her neck.

    Her blonde pony tail floats in the breeze
    traveling the countryside
    looking for a place to belong
    to put her at ease, so she could know why
    life made her soul seem so wrong.

    A princess of all she owned
    a peasant to those who knew her not
    all in all, another face in the crowd
    invisible to the warmth of any rays caught
    of any longer the sun.

    * * *
    Down she ventures, lonely little girl
    life burdened her, in a lonely little world.
    Nobody cared, except that one
    and He was all she ventured for far
    She needed guidance, so she stole the stars.

    Awakening herself, to find Him in trouble
    even if he was His makeshift double
    She solved His problem, and away again
    a soul trapped within a frozen flame -
    The fire burns inside
    but she's cold on the outs.
    Inside you can hear the little girl crying.
    The same little girl, who stole the stars.




    Submitted on 2005-01-06 18:05:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey! I think this was really cool! I mean, I never heard of a poem based on a song from a game! hehe. :) I didn't hear the music, but I like what I read. Nice job, and a very clever little story!
    Have a nice day!
    -Shawnothan
    | Posted on 2005-01-06 00:00:00 | by Shawnothan | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there. Well, the title is what drew me to this piece, since I'm an Astronomy nut and stars are among my favorite things. I really liked this piece.

    She stole a star
    from the dark and gloomy sky.
    Loved it as her very own
    captured it its very own case,
    draped about her neck.

    You expressed the thought clearly without complicating it too much with a lot of excess. Nice work.

    By the way, I noticed that it says up there in your info the you're from Charlotte. I'm also from Charlotte. You wouldn't happen to go to Independence would you?

    Anyhoo...much love.
    | Posted on 2005-01-06 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]
      Love the image of stealing stars - gave it a magical quality,a beautiful dreamy fantasy!

    The 1st stanza's pretty sad though. So cold and lonely!
    | Posted on 2005-01-06 00:00:00 | by Maverique | [ Reply to This ]



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