Life begins and ends with a tunnel and a splash of light
It comes as a flood and leaves as a trickle
Every day away from the darkness of the womb
We burn impatiently towards a new light
Great lines, just brilliant. The first line is one of the best I've ever read (true!) I love the splash, the flood, and the trickle (is that a lovely little reference to incontinence, or I am I just being crass, as usual?) And the last line imaged up a candle, impatiently burning. I love your reference to the "light" as I too believe in the light that we're all heading for eventually (and I'm not talking about any christian thing) Sorry for raving, but I loved it! Be happy Graeme
Seriously profound depth and observation. I could debate this poem with someone for days. Is it that we travel toward light because we think it's outside of us? I just received an ad for tapes to learn how to channel psychic forces inwardly instead of outside ourselves. The author claims we have all the answers within us. I believe that's true. Oops! am I skimming over the surface of this? See how you made me think? Every line of this is my favorite. Discovering cuddle is a fun pastime. Nan
was it pink floyd who sang "the sun is the same in the relative way, but you're older shorter of breath and one day closer to death" but i like your interpretation of life being a journey from one light to another.
Wow... that's really cool, cuds! (Why do people insist on being naughty at every possible opportunity? *cough-cough-GHOST* ) Anyway, I like it very much... It reads like one of those little inspirational sayings you can find on polished rocks, or picture-frames... it's very... thought-provoking. I like it. <><
thats nice and in depth, its another way of looking at waking up in the morning, and hoping you are drowned by the flood, and left to nothing by the trickle... Great Job!
Submission Name: Burn Impatiently Toward Light
) Anyway, I like it very much... It reads like one of those little inspirational sayings you can find on polished rocks, or picture-frames... it's very... thought-provoking. I like it. <><
