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    dots Submission Name: Burn Impatiently Toward Lightdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
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    dotsBurn Impatiently Toward Lightdots
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    Life begins and ends with a tunnel and a splash of light.
    It comes as a flood and leaves as a trickle.
    Every day away from the darkness of the womb,
    we burn impatiently towards a new light.






    Submitted on 2004-03-24 09:03:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great lines, just brilliant. The first line is one of the best I've ever read (true!) I love the splash, the flood, and the trickle (is that a lovely little reference to incontinence, or I am I just being crass, as usual?) And the last line imaged up a candle, impatiently burning. I love your reference to the "light" as I too believe in the light that we're all heading for eventually (and I'm not talking about any christian thing)
    Sorry for raving, but I loved it! Be happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Seriously profound depth and observation. I could debate this poem with someone for days. Is it that we travel toward light because we think it's outside of us?
    I just received an ad for tapes to learn how to channel psychic forces inwardly instead of outside ourselves. The author claims we have all the answers within us. I believe that's true. Oops! am I skimming over the surface of this? See how you made me think? Every line of this is my favorite. Discovering cuddle is a fun pastime.
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-01-04 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      was it pink floyd who sang
    "the sun is the same in the relative way, but you're older
    shorter of breath and one day closer to death"
    but i like your interpretation of life being a journey from one light to another.
    | Posted on 2004-03-25 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow... that's really cool, cuds! (Why do people insist on being naughty at every possible opportunity? *cough-cough-GHOST* ) Anyway, I like it very much... It reads like one of those little inspirational sayings you can find on polished rocks, or picture-frames... it's very... thought-provoking. I like it. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-24 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
      thats nice and in depth, its another way of looking at waking up in the morning, and hoping you are drowned by the flood, and left to nothing by the trickle... Great Job!
    | Posted on 2004-03-24 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]


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