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    dots Submission Name: Willow Treesdots

    Author: ForsakenAngel
    ASL Info:    19/F/Arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    6.37 - 147/73/18
    Words: 13
    Class/Type: Haiku/Nature
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       I don't really know how to explain it I just wanted to know your oppinions.

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    dotsWillow Treesdots

    I travel throughout.
    The wind is calling my name,
    to the willow trees.

    Submitted on 2005-01-06 23:04:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You are working with the basic of haiku simplicity: 5-7-5 format, but the secret is making this type of poem paint a picture(s) with clarity. This piece doesn't do that for me and maybe all this needs is some refurbishing/editing for clarity sake K?
    ~smile always with love Cheryl~
    | Posted on 2005-03-29 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not exactly sure what you mean by 'to the willow trees'... do you belong with the willow trees... is that why your name is being carried there? I'm confus-ed... anywho... it was simple. That's kinda what haikus are meant to be... but... yeah. Hey... if you wanna read a haiku... that's like... the most awesomest haiku ever... I'm not trying to get you to look at it to improve yourself or anything... but I think everyone should read it... it's on my favorites... it's the one called 'The Poet'... I was amaz-ed... when I read it... it's real good. Take care...

    - Poet... of the Night
    | Posted on 2005-01-23 00:00:00 | by poetofthenight | [ Reply to This ]
      Weeping willow- call my name… We can kill them all ifin’ ya wanna… But then there are pigs-I mean cops- no I mean pigs. Damn the law and societies looking down on murder for no reason… or even murder plain for that matter… Thanx for the fave addition too!
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      The poem is the wind, gently calling to us all! Nice. If I were to change anything, I would delete the comma, but it's neither here nor there.
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by boompatah | [ Reply to This ]

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