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    dots Submission Name: wanteddots
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    Author: k kin
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 56/51/12
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       never know what i want...but this is where i try to understand myself


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    dotswanteddots
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    hey is there a place
    for people like me out there
    still want to believe in
    things that make real smiles
    disguise my solitude in company
    pull back from an absurd reality
    afraid to close my eyes
    scared to see nothing

    there were words forming in my mind
    but they died and disappeared
    now the silence that i hear
    is the sound of confusion
    opened up an empty soul
    wished that love would fill it up
    when the clouds go dark like that
    the thunder is the only voice

    i once felt the touch of air
    the one thing that would always be there
    as it brushed through my nakedness
    comforted me inside
    i wanted nothing more
    i wanted everything
    i guess thats just me then
    and this how i've always been




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      I thought your words were excellent, some great contradictions really conveyed your thoughts and enotions well, but the no punctuation format didn't help the piece much, if you punctuate it, this would be a superb read.
    Very well done.
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      scared to see nothing? i wish i could close my eyes and see nothing, but i can't i see nothing, i see things that i wish i hadn't done. the poem itself was vague, are you lonely? or confused? or you just want to be wanted? it's a familiar feeling to me. it's hard to say what will happen from one day to the next though...those things we may never know. the air that had touched you once, just may blow by again, it's been known to do that. i hope that one day your soul will be lifted up and filled with love, it's the best feeling you know...when you look into the one that you love and you know... you just know.. that you love her, damn, i gotta stop rambling. hey, take care though... and have a good day.


    brent
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]


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