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    dots Submission Name: The Darkdots
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    Author: ARCHIE
    ASL Info:    37 YOA Male in Africa
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 90/126/40
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Darkdots
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    The Dark stepped into me last night
    it filled the cracks
    it stopped the holes
    it ripped the fabric of my soul

    The Dark sat by my bed last night
    it whispered softly
    it called my name
    and then it drifted off again

    The Dark was banished with the dawn
    it hid its head
    it cried goodbye
    it gripped at shadows with a sigh




    Submitted on 2005-01-07 05:35:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this! It just flows and works so well.
    I especially like:
    "The Dark stepped into me last night
    it filled the cracks
    it stopped the holes
    it ripped the fabric of my soul"

    Nice job!
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by brassmonkey2009 | [ Reply to This ]
      Amazing it had a flow of water it was extreamly good i like the emotion and i like how you worded everything Very nice! but if it was a bit longer it would have reached i higher state of poetry i know you can do it keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by runaway_poet | [ Reply to This ]
      wow that is awesome!i love the flow and just like brassmonkey said that whole thing right here is great
    The Dark stepped into me last night
    t filled the cracks
    it stopped the holes
    it ripped the fabric of my soul"
    yea kool kool
    keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by UNunderStood | [ Reply to This ]


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