Yay! The warm fuzzies are attacking and launching their eggs into my blood stream! Yay!
Um, there are a few things that I would change. . . "dissected" is spelled with two "s's". . . also, in the sixth stanza you stated at the beginning that you never meant to do the things that you are fixing to list, so saying (well, not intentionally) is sort of redundant. I would take that off. Also, in this poem I think that the ALL CAPS takes away from the piece. Try italicizing or bolding, because that gives it a smoother, more professional look.
awww, that's sweet. It started off really random, although i really enjoyed that part. And then it became more serious near the end. And I'm sure that seriousness would be greatly appreciated by the person you wrote it for it you were to share
what a super slick love poem, so refreshing this write is. and the format you choose was delightful, interesting and personal. I love the telling it like it is message in this poem, then ending it with being a love poem with such devotion,bravo
This is such a diffrent piece,I love the way it was played out,you did it so well. You have a unique talent,and there are quite alot of things you dont like(lol).Just to say this is great and thank you for sharing,I enjoyed reading it.