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    dots Submission Name: Neverdots
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    Author: Anchiale
    ASL Info:    32/F/AL
    Elite Ratio:    3.56 - 88/73/14
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 991
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    Description:
       Just something I wanted to expound on...


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    dotsNeverdots
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    I have never...
    smoked
    taken drugs
    or had a man to indulge in those things

    I have never liked...
    liver
    spaghetti
    or neckbones

    I have never...
    understood Geometry
    disected an animal (yes, my team failed thanks to me)
    or used Calculus in my everyday routine

    I have never...
    seen the peach drop in Georgia for New Years
    gone to the place where it never rains (southern California)
    danced the night away in St.Lucia (although I do plan on doing that)

    I have never...
    ran over a pedestrian (although animals beware)
    liked automatic transmissions
    enjoyed driving for long periods of time

    I have never wanted to...
    bungie jump
    be alone
    or hurt anyone's feelings (well not intentionally)

    BUT MOST OF ALL...

    I have never...
    believed in soulmates until now
    felt so loved and beautiful as I do now
    wanted to spend the rest of my life with someone until you came along

    AND...

    I will never give up on us and our dreams,
    or take you for granted and make you feel unappreciated,
    and this is a vow...
    I WILL NEVER EVER BREAK.




    Submitted on 2005-01-07 09:44:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Yay! The warm fuzzies are attacking and launching their eggs into my blood stream! Yay!

    Um, there are a few things that I would change. . . "dissected" is spelled with two "s's". . . also, in the sixth stanza you stated at the beginning that you never meant to do the things that you are fixing to list, so saying (well, not intentionally) is sort of redundant. I would take that off. Also, in this poem I think that the ALL CAPS takes away from the piece. Try italicizing or bolding, because that gives it a smoother, more professional look.

    Other than that, it was really good. Great write.

    -Secret
    | Posted on 2005-01-13 00:00:00 | by secret moon | [ Reply to This ]
      awww, that's sweet. It started off really random, although i really enjoyed that part. And then it became more serious near the end. And I'm sure that seriousness would be greatly appreciated by the person you wrote it for it you were to share
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      what a super slick love poem, so refreshing this write is. and the format you choose was delightful, interesting and personal. I love the telling it like it is message in this poem, then ending it with being a love poem with such devotion,bravo

    Keep writing and I will keep reading
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      I wish that I still shared these sentaments. this is a sweet piece and very biographical, while being a new and refreshing look at romance poetry. thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by cainboy | [ Reply to This ]
      This is such a diffrent piece,I love the way it was played out,you did it so well. You have a unique talent,and there are quite alot of things you dont like(lol).Just to say this is great and thank you for sharing,I enjoyed reading it.
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by Forgiven | [ Reply to This ]


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