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    dots Submission Name: Whats Missingdots
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    Author: Paconess1006
    ASL Info:    16/M/Charlotte, NC
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 99/126/46
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 938
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       Only because I have but very little of it. I'm so very afraid of rejection. But why? Here's why.


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    dotsWhats Missingdots
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    Its that assuring reassurance I find
    that none can undermine,
    Its that defining definition
    that coaxes me into sublime.
    Its the lists of tasks that deem me irresponsible
    to the responsibilities at hand.
    Its what I see inside
    that venture to see back at me.
    Its the thing we hate to love
    but all need regardlessly,
    Its what makes me want to find you
    not that you were so hard to find
    Its just that its a difficulty
    with difficult proportions
    can sometimes hold back my true identity.
    Its the greeting I practice forever
    and forever that practices on me
    when its just out of reach
    and I try to inch into availability.
    Its the unresponsive responses
    that cause me to go numb when it leaves me.
    Its the only excuse I have to not approach you
    when you approach me.
    Its the only paper thin wall
    that possesses more strength that I could assume,
    at the placement of my misplaced sense
    Its my lack of confidence.




    Submitted on 2005-01-07 21:06:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, i think you did such a great job writing this one** when i was in high school i was this way, and to this day still am to a point, i had a thing for this guy for a few years but never approached him on the issue. when he came near me it's like i would shut down and become speechless in fear he would laugh at my words. well came to find out a year after high school that he always had a thing for me but thought i was just not interested. so to sum up here, it sucks having the wall around you that seems impossibel to find a door, but a glimpse in the window would surprise you. i wish you luck in finding yours***
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
      I rally like this overall..i think it is a terrific piece...i think the first part really grabbed me the most though..

    Its that assuring reassurance I find
    that none can undermine,
    Its that defining definition
    that coaxes me into sublime.

    and it just flowed so nicely..i can really relate to this piece...thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      It's definately and interesting piece. Playing words back with repetition and twisting them sleightly, very good idea. Some of the rhyming seems strained to rhyme or something. Not a bad poem though, i liked it.
    | Posted on 2005-01-07 00:00:00 | by Mercy December | [ Reply to This ]


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