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    dots Submission Name: An Eternity of Silencedots

    Author: isselman2001
    Elite Ratio:    5.38 - 37/47/46
    Words: 415
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsAn Eternity of Silencedots

    I propose a moment of silence
    for each person who died in South East Asia
    last week,
    When the Oceans rose and covered mountains
    and the Heavens looked away.
    A moment for each and every fatality -
    regardless of their race or origin; they all died
    the same.
    A moment for every man, woman and child, store owner and businessman
    tourist and vacationer
    who lost a life that day...
    For all of the more than one-hundred fifty-thousand:
    a moment of silence, apiece.
    And while we are all standing silent,
    I wish to dedicate another moment
    to the Troops still stationed in Iraq -
    Who were promised leave the Christmas before last,
    and did not abandon their country
    when their country abandoned them
    with listless resignation.
    Also, a moment each for every casualty in Iraq;
    now 10,000 and still climbing...
    A moment each for the 1350 fatalities since the start of the war,
    and a moment for each of the 10,000+ wounded.
    A moment for each and every man and woman killed in war.
    This is a poem for the first
    and the last
    and everyone in between.
    This is a poem for the 101st
    and the 150,000th.
    This is a poem for 1942 and 1492,
    911, 912 and 913,
    For 1967 and 1917,
    For 1776 and 1699 -
    This is a poem for all of them -
    For each and every -
    For the troops
    and huddled masses of civilians
    forever immortalized in the history books
    As anonymous statistics.
    This poem goes out to all -
    To each and every one -
    To all and every -
    Not forgetting one.
    And for all of them:
    A century of silence.
    A million years of silence for the people who organize wars and lead innocent men into the pits of Hell,
    force Nations into chaos,
    and put brothers on opposite sides of a Civil war.
    A billion years for the victims of such wars,
    and a millennium for the people whose scars shall never heal.
    And finally, an Eternity of silence of for All of mankind,
    Be silent, for goodness sake, and let us deafen those
    who murder with speech,
    Let us mute those who muted us
    and stop those who kill our own.
    Let us be silent for ever - for as long as it takes.
    Let your lawnmowers run silent and your floors be still...
    Don't disturb the dead...
    Let us be silent indefinitely,
    like all of our dead are for us.

    Submitted on 2005-01-07 21:17:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Holy heck. That was a GRAND piece right there. Like seriously how can you only have had one comment thus far. It shocks me.

    Most probably looked at the length of it and moved on, but its really not that long in reading.

    Anyway, as much as I love thsi piece I think you culd rally do without some tf the ending. At that point it felt like you were pushing things a bit. But maybe I'm just a crazy person who believes she can fly?


    Vondaful piece, it goes on my favourites.

    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      This was phenomenal. In truth, the poem itself needs some polishing, but your subject and the way you've presented it are magnificent. My eyes were glued to the screen as I read it. I could not stop. Your anger, frustration and reverence came out strongly. I do think for a strict tribute, you should leave out the political statement, gentle though it was. That spoiled it a little for me.

    One little error that glared out at me is near the end where you're presenting the numbers and they increase with each line - a billion years is longer than a millenium. A millenium is a thousand years. Proofreading and editing and little polishing here and there (a very little) and this would be just about perfect. It's incredibly good they way it sits. Thank you. mae
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by mae | [ Reply to This ]

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