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    dots Submission Name: Another Dreamdots
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    Author: Skinwalker
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 36/57/28
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    Description:
       Wierd and funny. A dream scenario that has a wierd twist. Enjoy.


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    dotsAnother Dreamdots
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    My mind clears a cloudy haze, my brain's in a daze.
    I search high and low for my soul, I run thru a maze.
    What will I find when I find thee?
    What is it that I shall finally see?
    I see you in the horizon leaning, I dash for you.
    You with long hair the color of darkened wool,
    A mind that could enlighten the wierdest fool,
    A smile that could melt the coldest of hearts,
    And your scent the smell of a warm....fart?
    I fall thru the clouds at this stench
    And land on a pillowed and warm bench.
    I feel the bench give way, scare a stinky feline, and suddenly careen.
    I fell out of bed, almost pancaking my cat, I guess I had a dream.




    Submitted on 2005-01-08 00:17:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by max | [ Reply to This ]
      this was pretty funny man, i got a big picture of you running towards this girl with with beautiful hair and right when you get there, it's like this huge budweiser, morning after farts. whao, i laughed at this one. i just felt bad for your cat, i've done a couple of those when i lived back home. man that was funny.


    brent
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      It was funny,silly and dumb,but whose dreams always make sense,lol now I must say, the women who may sleep with you may keep thier eyes open,lol

    keep writing and i will keep reading
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      lol! I loved the lines:

    You with long hair the color of darkened wool,
    A mind that could enlighten the wierdest fool,
    A smile that could melt the coldest of hearts,
    And your scent the smell of a warm...fart?

    this was freakin awesome! did you have jsut a hard time ryhming something, or was it really your dream?? (the fart thing) :) lol! nonetheless, I loved this, thanks for the laugh!
    ~Amanda
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by AmandaLyn | [ Reply to This ]
      I fell out of bed, almost pancaking my cat, I guess I had a dream.

    *lol* fantastic ending to a great little write ...I loved it for what it was
    | Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]


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