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    dots Submission Name: Seasonal Loverdots
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    Author: reveries
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 54/74/23
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       I hope this turns on right.....spacing is very important in my poetry so if it doesn't read the poem on my site

    http://reveries-of-me.diary-x.com/journal.cgi?entry=20041024z


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    dotsSeasonal Loverdots
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    Green leaves turn brown as we sit on wrinkled linens
    white
    but stained with sweet sweat and breakfast cookie crumbs
    warm
    are your lips as they explore my neck coating it with affection
    worried
    that there aren't enough seconds in the day to love each other properly
    snow
    falls in thick sheets while we lay entwined, blanketed in harmony
    simple
    is your smile as you trace wet fingers around my naval and back down
    south
    the place you must return to when the trees begin to bloom again
    tears
    are all I have left as the apple blossoms conceal my heartache
    torn
    we are, though our hearts are forever entiwined
    together
    we'll lie again when the leave turn brown and the snow falls




    Submitted on 2005-01-08 01:15:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you are such a creative writer! I love everything that I have read from you. I feel like your sould leaks out in this one and that truly makes it beautiful.
    | Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm this poem was different but i enoyed it because i liek seeingn different types of writing... i love love poems lol so ive enjoyed your poems! :)
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by grinninggashes | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a cool way to put it,
    I like how you used the seasons along with love, you did a good job of putting the 2 together without mixing them so that determination was lost.
    that's cool.
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Laveina | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice work. Several aspects of this poem really struck me. First, you acquaint love with winter, usually spring is symbolized as a season of love, it is good to see some originality and a different perspective. Also, your form is brilliant and makes the poem smooth and easy to read. Once again, good poem. Later
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by TZPhelps | [ Reply to This ]
      thank you both....winter and love just seems so right to me. I was worried that the poem would get smooshed, which would be very very bad; word position is very important in understanding my poetry
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by reveries | [ Reply to This ]


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