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    dots Submission Name: Love donationdots
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    Author: Lady Vicious
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 33/47/16
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 769
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Yey new song and I luv it!!!


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    This strange sickness came all over me
    I had no strength
    Nor could I sleep
    Since you left me I have felt like this
    I miss your love
    I miss your kiss

    Chorus:
    Doctor tell me will I make it through
    Is there help for me?
    What can I do?

    For this addiction thereís no therapy
    No pills for love
    No band aid heals a broken heart

    Sat by the window and I starred outside
    Then laid in bed
    awoke all night
    Since you left me I have felt like this
    I need your love
    I need your kiss


    And I know this pain will stay
    No syrup makes it go away
    I have no hope in operation
    I donít need no blood donation
    If only I could turn back time
    Iíd make sure that you are mine
    Iím sure the only medication
    Is your love donation
    yeah your love donation

    Chorus:
    Doctor tell me will I make it through
    Is there help for me?
    What can I do?

    For this addiction thereís no therapy
    No pills for love
    No band aid heals a broken heart




    Submitted on 2005-01-08 06:55:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      cute....I like it a lot....I've sometimes felt love to be an illness. It's a beautiful song I especially like

    "
    For this addiction thereís no therapy
    No pills for love
    No band aid heals a broken heart "

    that had to be my favourite of all the lines
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by reveries | [ Reply to This ]
      Its always hard to get the full effect of lyrics i think, without hearing the music behind it. But i have a feeling this would make an awesome song..makes me think of alanis morrisette though for some reason...*lol*
    Anyway ...Good write...Well done
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, this certainly has rhythm behind it and the words are put very nicely throughout the song. Usually I would say that this lacks imagery, but as they are lyrics, I'll let you off that one. Where it says "awoke all night" shouldn't it be "awake all night." Although the former makes sense, the latter makes more of it, I think. That was the only problem that I could find with this. My favourite lines were:

    Since you left me I have felt like this
    I need your love
    I need your kiss

    And I think it was a pity that these weren't repeated with the rest of the chorus at the end.
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]


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