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    dots Submission Name: Waiting for the Raindots
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    Author: TDALBH
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 63/57/15
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       I wrote this just last night. I feel as though this is as close to a happy love poem as I'll get for now, maybe in a few months I'll be able to right happy things again. Oh well, I know its not that good, but please look it over and tell me what you think anyway. Thanks!


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    dotsWaiting for the Raindots
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    I love you like the rain
    Always falling for you
    A dark, mysterious love
    Full of secrets plain to see,
    If only we could read the rain

    You love me like a River
    Always flowing
    Always changing
    Washing my pain away

    I love you like the sky
    An endless wave of blue
    A wave of love soaked in sadness
    The kind of Heart meant for you

    You love me like a bird
    You sing sweet songs
    that fill me with such happiness
    And a feeling of an end assured

    I love you like a wave
    So simple in my longing
    So gentile in my ending

    You love me like a butterfly
    Your soft and beautiful
    But to touch you is to murder

    I love you like a Willow
    I stand unmoving
    Sadly waiting for your love
    Waiting for the rain




    Submitted on 2005-01-08 08:48:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I absolutely loved this poem. I mean there ar eno words to describe about how awesome it is. I just got blown away by it but you wanna know the part that got me the most was the ending. I am a sucker for a good ending. I think that the way you ended it was absolutely brilliant and perfect for the poem. I can't help it but I have to put it in here so the I can read it again, just that part.
    I love you like a Willow
    I stand unmoving
    Sadly waiting for your love
    Waiting for the rain
    I love the rain with a passion. I would stand all day in the rain if my parents wouldn't make me come inside for fear that I might catch my death.
    Well seez ya later. Angel
    | Posted on 2005-02-14 00:00:00 | by ForsakenAngel | [ Reply to This ]
      Waiting for the Rain
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    I love you like the rain
    Always falling for you
    A dark, mysterious love
    Full of secrets plain to see,
    If only we could read the rain

    I like this stanza but I think that you can make it stronger in some way. But I really enjoyed how you compared love to nature and how it appeals to you through love. I especially liked the ending. It was supberb. I think when you said you were standing under the willow waiting for the rain was excellent imagery, because in the beginning you said that the rain was you falling in love. I liked that very much. But I know that you are as happy as you are going to get right now and I hope you will feel better so I can get to know your character a little better through your poetry. But that's for the read and the imagery. You don't have to take my advice, but I'm just throwing some friendly critique out there. Okay then...keep up the good work.

    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is wonderful...
    i know your work, and i know what you're going through...
    so...
    just think happy if you can, don't be all discouraged, at least don't act happy around you know who, my b/f. cause you know how he is. lol.. we can act happy together.
    i love this stanza:
    I love you like the sky
    An endless wave of blue
    A wave of love soaked in sadness
    The kind of Heart meant for you
    it says a lifetime of works.. the words i could never write, time after time searching for those words but never finding them.
    thank you~sarah
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by darkwisdom623 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that is such a beautiful poem. I love it!
    "I love you like a Willow
    I stand unmoving
    Sadly waiting for your love
    Waiting for the rain"
    That is my favorite part of the poem, probably cause I can relate to it the most. I don't know how many times I have waited around for someone I like and though liked me back. *starts drifting off to the past...*
    well anyways, i love your poem! Keep up the good work!
    ~Kriss
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by juss_kriss | [ Reply to This ]


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