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I loved you


Author: RedRoseofBlood
ASL Info:    19/f/outsideyourwindow
Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 592 /582 /135
Words: 84
Class/Type: Story /Depressed
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I loved you



Last night while I lay sleeping
I thought of you while dreaming
The many days I spent with you
All the things that we went through
I dreamt of all the memories
That were lost
When you left me
I dreamt of all the love we shared
And now the feling of being scared
Because you are gone
How could you not know I loved you
I suppose it didnt show
Now all I'm left with is the guilt
Being punished by being alone




Submitted on 2005-01-08 11:30:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I never thought I'd read something that close to how I feel. I only wish the one I love could love me as much as I love her. Life sucks when your toy'ed with and someone plays with your heart. I hope you get your love back like you deserve.
| Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
  this peice is astounding and scary how much i can relate because im going through somthing eerily similar to this poem portrays i must say that this is indeed one of my favs cant wait to see more
| Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by runaway_poet | [ Reply to This ]
  this peice is astounding and scary how much i can relate because im going through somthing eerily similar to this poem portrays i must say that this is indeed one of my favs cant wait to see more
| Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by runaway_poet | [ Reply to This ]


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