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    dots Submission Name: I loved youdots
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    Author: RedRoseofBlood
    ASL Info:    19/f/outsideyourwindow
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 592/582/135
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Story/Depressed
    Total Views: 1259
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    Bytes: 502



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    dotsI loved youdots
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    Last night while I lay sleeping
    I thought of you while dreaming
    The many days I spent with you
    All the things that we went through
    I dreamt of all the memories
    That were lost
    When you left me
    I dreamt of all the love we shared
    And now the feling of being scared
    Because you are gone
    How could you not know I loved you
    I suppose it didnt show
    Now all I'm left with is the guilt
    Being punished by being alone




    Submitted on 2005-01-08 11:30:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I never thought I'd read something that close to how I feel. I only wish the one I love could love me as much as I love her. Life sucks when your toy'ed with and someone plays with your heart. I hope you get your love back like you deserve.
    | Posted on 2005-01-24 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      this peice is astounding and scary how much i can relate because im going through somthing eerily similar to this poem portrays i must say that this is indeed one of my favs cant wait to see more
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by runaway_poet | [ Reply to This ]
      this peice is astounding and scary how much i can relate because im going through somthing eerily similar to this poem portrays i must say that this is indeed one of my favs cant wait to see more
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by runaway_poet | [ Reply to This ]


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