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    dots Submission Name: Prison of passiondots
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    Author: Dana
    ASL Info:    23/F/Dreamland
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 79/87/26
    Words: 231
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsPrison of passiondots
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    Love guarantee of madness
    Loss of your mind
    A mental suicide of any kind
    Gentle revolver against your head
    Leading you straight to bed

    Filthy thoughts caught by a shotgun
    The force of love knocking us down
    Clothes on us designed by love
    Nutrition for soul, bliss for the eyes
    Amazing beauty the eyes have never seen

    Sanity has vanished, gone to nowhere
    Grave of sanity, tombstone for insanity
    Delightful feelings on your skin
    Touch of a soft velvet and a silk
    Every sensitive part has its own story

    Drowning in your loving eyes
    Showing you the world of feelings
    Flow of emotions, loss of breath
    Another dimension, place called love

    Wild dance in the moonlight
    Festival of passion and lust
    Explosion of feelings
    Rainbow of sentiments
    A flash of love in the night

    Nectar of ecstasy, juice from your lips
    White vanilla killing your mouth
    Fiasco at the factory of cream
    Sweet fruit you have never tasted before

    Lovers prisoners of the night
    Heat between two flames of light
    In the prison of kisses
    Portion of lust, dessert of trust
    A fear to be lost in the starry sky

    Touch of a gentle hand, embrace of night
    Leading us through the dream
    Discovering another world for me and you
    Guiding us to the paradise called love.

    by DANA 2005




    Submitted on 2005-01-08 15:10:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is totally awesome, you have an extraordinarry talent. I luv your metephors and everything else.
    Wild dance in the moonlight
    Festival of passion and lust
    Explosion of feelings
    Rainbow of sentiments
    A flash of love in the night


    Lovers prisoners of the night
    Heat between two flames of light
    In the prison of kisses
    Portion of lust, desert of trust
    A fear to be lost in the starry sky


    These are my two favorite stanza's.
    Excellent write!

    Rain
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      I love what you have here...but dare to suggest that it could be even better...i think that the word love is a little overused and some of the ryhme is forcedand unnecessary...i think this piece would be better without the ryhme at all...the wording is so beautiful and descriptive that the ryhme just takes focus away from the imagery...at least thats my thoughts :) i do love many parts of this though...it is so pretty

    Wild dance in the moonlight
    Festival of passion and lust
    Explosion of feelings
    Rainbow of sentiments
    A flash of love in the night


    Sweet fruit you have never tasted before

    Lovers &#8211; prisoners of the night
    Heat between two flames of light
    In the prison of kisses
    Portion of lust,

    keep writing :)
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      i love yah work this was great...Filthy thoughts caught by a shotgun
    The force of love knocking us down
    Clothes on us designed by love
    Nutrition for soul, bliss for the eyes
    Amazing beauty the eyes have never seen

    Sanity has vanished, gone to nowhere
    Grave of sanity, tombstone for insanity
    Delightful feelings on your skin
    Touch of a soft velvet and a silk
    Every sensitive part has its own story...Mah Favorite part
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Yella_Bone05 | [ Reply to This ]


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