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    dots Submission Name: Cry (revised)dots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 98
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 711
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    Description:
       This a revision of the other one like it, but i think this is the final draft.


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    dotsCry (revised)dots
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    It's alright to cry
    just let it fly
    Don't lie
    It's not a crime to cry
    neither do I like to cry
    yet it helps your mind
    you sit there and cry for help
    yet no one is there
    so you just sit there
    stairing in the mirror
    and wonder how I could makes this clear
    It's alright to cry
    just let fly.
    It hurt when some one you love says good bye.
    Today is a perfect day to cry.
    don't try to be so sly
    and hide
    when your crying.
    Just let it fly.




    Submitted on 2005-01-08 17:40:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      that was a really pretty poem! ur rite it is alright to cry! ppl can relate to this poem and realize that its ok to cry! good job!
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Your poems is really good. You should try to make your rhymes sound more natural and not so much forced. I think you need to spend less time trying to make things work, and go with what you know and what expresses stuff better. The message gets lost in all the rhymes. Your very good though. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
      yes its ok to cry, its better than holding it in.
    i think a real man is the one who cries and feel compassionate w/others.
    some think that crying is for women only, they miss the point of being humans
    great write
    much love koolspirit
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by bilal anaim | [ Reply to This ]


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