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Submission Name: Sam dots

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Author:	Crow
ASL Info:	21/f/Georgia
Elite Ratio:	3.93 - 409/471/70
Words:	123

Class/Type:	Poetry/Death
Total Views:	448
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	829

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I...I don't know where this came from. No idea. Im all...teary and crying now. -sniffles- Darn it, gone and made myself sad. ITS SAD PEOPLE! DONT READ IF YOU HATE TO CRY! -runs off bawling-

Sam

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The wafting scent of fresh baked rolls
and butter smeared with care.
Turkey slices smothered in warm gravy
placed carefully in the tupperware.

A potato, baked, with sour creame
is the third item on my list
fourth comes a thermos of cider
then its out into the air thats brisk.

Scarf wrapped tightly round my neck
to cover from the biting chill
a full miles walk I have to go
for a single act of pure goodwill.

Laying there, his eyes shut tight
beneath a cardboard roof
blanket pulled up to his scruffy chin
I know he's dead, i need no proof.

Tupperware set down gently
beside a forever sleeping man
wipe away my single tear
"Merry Christmas, Sam..."

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2: I dunno...
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  HI, tis Truffly...ahhhh yes, the "Sam" one you read to me so quietly over the phone. Wow. Now that I've read it, I need a good couple of minutes to get over the wave of emotion that barreled into me...and yes, I don't try to cry if I can help it, which is unfortunate in a way. As a society, we're just so closed to emotion, and I'm glad this poem expressed just that. Grubby, I think you can have this one submitted for publication somewhere. I know I'd submit it.
| Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by Trufflepiggy | [ Reply to This ]
  This is indeed very sad, and I must say , it is a very odd thing to just think of out of the blue. I think most people viewing the homeless and destitute feel bad about their situation, but it seems so hopeless a problem. You are showing here that each small act will have an effect,-it mat have been too late for Sam to enjoy the meal, but the act of preparing and delivering it was a good start-just look at all the empathy you have stirred up here. So writing about your story, even though not a real event, stirs all who read it, and that reaction will in turn cause some good, somewhere , someday.
Nice write.I especially liked the way you detailed the preparation of the meal to go,-with attention and love, as if it were for your aged gramma across the road, or a hot lunch brought out to a loved one working out in the cold. (My daughter used to be a flagger and often got called out on short notice to work long, cold dark shifts in the middle of nowhere -that brought back memories of sending out a thermos of hot soup, homemade bread, treats and coffee)
Only crit would be to find find another three syllables for the repeated Tupperware,-but that's a small thing.
| Posted on 2005-02-15 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
  this is going onto my favorites. as a rather large man- im 5'10 225- my favorite part of holidays is the eating. as a longtime poet- i tutor and teach creative writing- i love well rhymed lyrical verse. since this piece is a double favorite personally, its going on my favorite writing pieces for this site. delicously brilliant- pun intended.
-Q
| Posted on 2005-01-28 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]
  hmm thats is something odd to just speraticaly come to mind. i would love to know what you were thinking when you wrote it. it was in my mind the best piece ive read in a while starts off pleasant then to grief. those are the poems that i like to read ones that knock you down when your off gaurd...it was a good poem.

ace
| Posted on 2005-02-23 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]
  beneath a cardboard roof
blanket pulled up to his scruffy chin
I know he's dead, i need no proof.

Tupperware set down gently
beside a forever sleeping man
wipe away my single tear
"Merry Christmas, Sam..."

this is sad that so many people are homeless and die. but a homeless person can touch your heart and soul like no other person can and its the gifts that they give you that keeps your heart compassionate. They are the people that lost everything and you were lucky to give him something. This did make me sad. I don't know what else to say. I'm speechless just like the person before me and that's hard to believe.
| Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]
  Aww that is so sad. Great now I am sad again *glare* I have to go paly my game again or something. I was sad all day...then happy...no sad. I blame you for this!
This was pretty good. I enjoyed it and it made me sad. I liked the flow and all that whatnot and am in not place to edit anything....
| Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Cigarette Smoke | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice piece,

I have to be honest in saying I didnt even notice your rhyme scheme until a couple stanzas in, and really I think you could do without the rhymes, but it flows pretty well as stands.

I couldnt tell by your descirption of this was true story piece or just something you thoguht of. I couldnt quite piece the whole thing together and get a 100% clear meaning, but maybe thats the way you meant for it to be.

"Tupperware set down gently
beside a forever sleeping man
wipe away my single tear
"Merry Christmas, Sam...""

Excellent ending, though I'm curious about this tupperware thing. Just coincidental that its used twice, or was it intentional. Perhaps Sam always bought tuppwerware? Haha, just wondering...

Nice piece.

--Kayla
| Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
  wow its an amazing piece! it is indeed verry sad but worth reading! i'm guessing sam was homeless. I live in a part of town where there are so many homeless people it is amazing and i never really thought about their sufferings. don't get me wrong i feel sorry for them and i wish i could help them and every now and then i do supper at the shelter but this reminded me that there is so much i could do for them! its inspiring. it makes me wish i had taken time to truly help them with out making them go to the shelter just for a warm meal!
Hannah

Again it is an amazing piece and thank you for posting it! even if you have no idea where the words came from it is still an awesome piece!
| Posted on 2005-01-08 00:00:00 | by Devils Angel | [ Reply to This ]
  this is a rather touching piece of work, i say that after i wasnt at all expecting it to be, you know,i thought you were being sarcastic with the whole rolls being buttered and things. you buit up a false sense of security with the preparing of the food etc, it seemed to me like a child taking the food and cider from their parents cupboards in secret. it really makes you think about how other people live, and how fellow humans rarely treat them as human beings, let alone reach out and offer them what they have to share. thanks for sharing
ellisa :)
| Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by ellisa | [ Reply to This ]

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