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    dots Submission Name: Life to death Death to lifedots
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    Author: EL
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 272/189/52
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLife to death Death to lifedots
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    I'm breathing my heart is beating
    My eyes are opened and my mind is racing
    I'm living laughing, smiling, crying, and frowning.
    I'm happy and I'm sad.
    I'm excitted and I'm bored.
    I love and I hate.
    I've got friends and enemys.
    I'm alive and yet I'm dead.
    I'm hurting from all the pain caused by the obstacles in this hell that is my life,
    From all the people who I love and hate
    From all my love ones whom I thought cared.
    I'm crying,
    I'm crying for the lost kids alone in this world,
    For other people's pain,
    For life and for death.
    I'm smiling,
    I'm smiling for the special moments that take place,
    For joy of others,
    For life and for death.
    I'm confused,
    I'm confused by the actions of others
    By the words full of hate,
    By life and by death.
    I'm afraid,
    I'm afraid that have lost,
    Lost the game we call life.




    Submitted on 2005-01-09 14:00:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i felt a little bipolar reading this

    there was soo much emotion being expressed

    i'm happy one moment then i'm upset the next

    i love your title thats what caught my eyes at first and the poem fits with it....

    this is great
    <3 truthbetold
    | Posted on 2007-07-05 00:00:00 | by truthbetold | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow you really descrided a lot of the emotions connected with life and death all in one poem
    I have never seen it done that way before, it's cool.
    | Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by alittlebithippy | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, I'm really impressed with this poem it seems like it communicates alot of ideas i share about life. Right now I'm really wondering whether I should be in love with life, just not care, or detest it. Cause while on the one hand life is full of love andf beauty its also full of hate and pain. Keep writing this was a good one.
    | Posted on 2005-02-16 00:00:00 | by Poor_Poet | [ Reply to This ]
      I can seriously dig on this. Indecision about everything but death. It's a promise that has to be kept. Just, work on your flow.
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by the_storyteller | [ Reply to This ]
      I like about how you talk about all the feelings that you feel. I can definitley realte to those feelings but I think its a little much about life and death. I like the beginning more then the end.
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by Hazel eyes Jess | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this it seems you put alot of emotion in to it and alot of feeling its really good keep writting alot of people could relate
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by Cutendemented | [ Reply to This ]


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