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    dots Submission Name: Her Texas Cowboydots
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    Author: Lost My Love 4ever
    ASL Info:    20 female New York
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 159/104/27
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       hey this is part 3 to emma and jason and goodbye jason so let me know how u like this one thanks


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    dotsHer Texas Cowboydots
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    Emma knows
    that she should listen to her friends
    she should get on with her life
    but how?
    Jason's it
    he's all she's ever known
    and her true soul-mate
    but he's thousands of miles away.
    Nobody can understand
    what she's going through,
    she puts a smile on her face
    but deep down
    she's crying.
    Crying for the love she's lost
    The love she desperately wants back.
    Emma finds herself
    at the beach
    completely alone
    thinking about all the times
    she was there with Jason
    Staring into the moon
    wondering where he is
    and if he thinks about her.
    She knows she cant go on
    longing for him
    it's unrealistic
    he's not coming back.
    Emma knows it
    and knows she has to face it
    One night she brings
    a single pink rose
    attached to it a note:
    "Jason-
    I'll never love another
    the way i love you
    no matter how many miles
    between us.
    I'll always remember you
    and no matter what
    you have my heart
    love always,
    Emma"
    She walks to the shore line
    and when the wave came up
    she kissed the rose
    and placed it gently into the ocean
    she closed her eyes
    and whispered
    "Goodbye forever
    my Texas Cowboy."




    Submitted on 2005-01-09 14:20:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this. It's sweet. I especially like the ending with the kissing the rose and placing it in the water then saying good bye forever. I'm at the stage in my life where I'm letting of past relationships and experiences and saying good bye. That's what this makes me think of. It is very hard to do. Anyways this is well written. I look forward to reading more. Good luck.
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]
      wow that was so sweet it almost mad me want tocry i love the way its written its very good i think everyone can relate to letting things go i know in my life thers alot that iv had to let go and still have to let go keep writtin id enjoy reading more
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by Cutendemented | [ Reply to This ]


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