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    dots Submission Name: Walking throughdots

    Author: EL
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 272/189/52
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsWalking throughdots

    Walking through darkness
    Walking through emptyness
    Turned face to face with misery,
    Just by taking one look at you,
    Walking beside darkness
    Walking beside emptyness
    Side by side with misery,
    all while searching in your eyes
    Looking for truth,
    Hoping for comfort,
    Finding nothing at all.
    Walking with darkness
    Walking with emptyness
    Hand in hand with misery,
    All by taking your hand,
    Believing all your lies,
    Trusting all your words,
    Crying everynight,
    Not being able to say good by.

    Just by believing all your lies,
    Trusting all your words.

    Submitted on 2005-01-09 14:22:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked this i thaught it was very well written and that the reader could also connect with you on an emotional basis, my favorite part of this was when you kept repeating the lines "Walking through darkness
    Walking through emptyness" because it really reminds the person reading on how you're feeling good write and i hope that i get to read more of your work!
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by Lost My Love 4ever | [ Reply to This ]
      With this poem, you took the old-age concept of lonliness and turned it into something all your own. Your emotion was blunt, unsubtle, and easily relatable. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by Lady Tragedy | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked how you explained how it was so hurtful to you and how you worded the whole poem. It was sad and I can totally feel where your coming from. Its great how you formed the whole poem!...GREAT WORK!
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by Hazel eyes Jess | [ Reply to This ]

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