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    dots Submission Name: Contradictions.dots
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    Author: Cigarette Smoke
    ASL Info:    15/female/A head lake
    Elite Ratio:    4.1 - 393/470/154
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Hurt me with your words of love.
    I'll listen deafly as you talk about the future
    and stare blindly on as you decide our life.

    I will cling to you numbly
    and whisper to you loudly
    then yell at you softly.
    Just keep hurting me with your words of love.

    Try to get high without your drugs
    Try to sing without your voice
    Try to love me after I hate you

    listen to me when I stop talking
    In my silence the truth will be spoken.
    My truth will bring more lies
    and I will love you with hatred.

    You help me live; won’t you die?
    You are suffocating me with your air.
    You’re killing me with your life.
    I love you but I hate you even more.

    Try to get high without your drugs
    Try to sing without your voice
    Try to love me after I hate you

    live after I kill you.
    Die after I bring you back to life.




    Submitted on 2005-01-09 14:35:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Now that's one hell of an "I hate you Poem"...Kudos to you sweet girl...it's about time i've read someone like you...beautiful write.
    | Posted on 2005-01-29 00:00:00 | by calling eve | [ Reply to This ]
      Pretty good, I liked it and I feel where your coming from. I like how it contradicts itself off and on. cool, ya, good one here keep it up.
    | Posted on 2005-03-01 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one. It isn't perfectly clear to me though, but I suppose it was meant to be that way. I couldn't help but think of an ex of mine while I was reading it. "Hurt me with your words of love.
    I'll listen deafly as you talk about the future
    and stare blindly on as you decide our life." That part was probebly the part that made me think f him the most. Thanks for writing!
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by TDALBH | [ Reply to This ]
      Through the contradicting statements made in this poem, you portrayed a clear image of raw, uninhibited emotion. I love how this work is both simple and deep at the same time.

    "Try to get high without your drugs
    Try to sing without your voice
    Try to love me after I hate you"

    This chorus rocks. I don't think it was too repetitive, like the others have posted.

    "live after I kill you.
    Die after I bring you back to life."

    This line really stood out to me. This is so well-written, creative, and unique, it seems like something you'd see on a movie poster or the cover of a book. Great work, I'm putting it on my favorites. Cheers.
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by Apocalyptica | [ Reply to This ]
      thats cool yo! although, i don't feel as unique b/c i got a poem titled "contradictions", but mine is more on the political side. its all good though! i am still feeling it! but anyways, this is my kinda stuff...similar to my writing style. ups to ya!
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by L.i. | [ Reply to This ]


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