I like this one. It isn't perfectly clear to me though, but I suppose it was meant to be that way. I couldn't help but think of an ex of mine while I was reading it. "Hurt me with your words of love. I'll listen deafly as you talk about the future and stare blindly on as you decide our life." That part was probebly the part that made me think f him the most. Thanks for writing!
Through the contradicting statements made in this poem, you portrayed a clear image of raw, uninhibited emotion. I love how this work is both simple and deep at the same time.
"Try to get high without your drugs Try to sing without your voice Try to love me after I hate you"
This chorus rocks. I don't think it was too repetitive, like the others have posted.
"live after I kill you. Die after I bring you back to life."
This line really stood out to me. This is so well-written, creative, and unique, it seems like something you'd see on a movie poster or the cover of a book. Great work, I'm putting it on my favorites. Cheers.
thats cool yo! although, i don't feel as unique b/c i got a poem titled "contradictions", but mine is more on the political side. its all good though! i am still feeling it! but anyways, this is my kinda stuff...similar to my writing style. ups to ya!
Submission Name: Contradictions.
