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    dots Submission Name: Sorry for Tryingdots
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    Author: TDALBH
    Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 63/57/15
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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       First of all, I want to thank my friend Sarah for the title. I just wrote this after being yelled at by a loved one, he said he was sorry, but he scares me so much when he gets mad.


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    dotsSorry for Tryingdots
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    I'm sorry if I hurt you.
    I never meant to make you mad
    Make you yell
    I only wanted to help

    I'm so sorry I said something
    I never meant to make you mad
    Make you hit me
    I only wanted to be close to you

    I'm sorry that I cried to you
    I never meant to make you mad
    Make you kick me
    I only wanted you to notice me

    I'm so sorry that I screamed for you
    I never meant to make you mad
    Make you murder me
    I only wanted you to stop
    I only wanted you




    Submitted on 2005-01-09 18:13:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey there... sorry for the delay in response...

    it's strange how when abuse is laid out on us we fall into a pit of heavy guilt... it's automatic even though our logic knows we are not to blame for the other's behaviors... the human mind, there's just so much left to learn about it...

    your poem is very real... I'm also thrown back into memories of situations where warped people in my life have treated me the way you express it here... I had the same feelings, the same thoughts... it's eerie in a way...

    you definitely reached me with your words... whoever this person is... I hope with all of my heart you find the strength and confidence in yourself to steer away from them... you know it deep inside of you that this is all wrong... don't stay in the hopes of changing them... whatever requirements/conditions this person is imposing on you, realize it's all unreasonable and they will never be satisfied whatever you do... the problem lies within themselves... you are not the instigator of these behaviors, dear... listen to your instincts... they are not lying to you about this...

    my thoughts are with you *hug*

    thanks for taking the time to read and comment my posting... I appreciate it very much :)

    take care *hug* xx
    | Posted on 2005-01-15 00:00:00 | by Fiine Moods | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an excellent write. It is so true to what is going on in my life at this time. Actions and events are never ending in a relationship or a friendship, and sometimes the outcomes are great and some are depressing. But it all depends on how we look at it and deal with it. Sometimes certain events occur and we are not responsible for them, but we still feel sorry. And then there are the times when we mess up really bad and the other person is equal to the task that no one wants to forive and ammend the problem. I think everyone is sorry for a wrong doing, it is just getting the cooler heads to prevail and sit down, listen, love, communicate and forgive. Things do happen, but if you handle it with understanding, communication, compromising, and listening, the rest will follow. And trust your heart, not what is being told to you from others.
    | Posted on 2005-01-13 00:00:00 | by wildcatchamps | [ Reply to This ]
      This is good ...actually as soon as i saw the first line i got the jealous guy song in my head
    I never meant to hurt you ...
    I didnt mean to make you cry

    You know how it goes....anyway ....nice write
    thanks for the read
    | Posted on 2005-02-28 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      first of all this is a really good poem don't change a thing it is truely some food for thought. i am not normally in to reading poems like this but it really broke my heart for you.
    on another note. it is always hard when some one you love gets mad and normally depending on the situation it is also scary you never know what to expect that kinda thing any how i commend you for your work.
    Archer
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by Archer | [ Reply to This ]
      Dont let this happen to you! If this is physical abuse get help, right now. NO ONE deserves to ever be in this kind of situation, and if you think it will mess up your family or something of that nature cast that fear aside and move on. Its messing up YOU, and you dont need that kind of thing on you.

    Your poem was good, a cry out in desperation and I feel your word choice and format fit that cry out so theres nothign really I would tell you to change.

    Seriosuly though, dont let someone else bring you pain. You're your own person and you can do whatever you want/need to do. Hope things get better:O)

    --Kayla
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      i love this... and it's perfect for my mood right now.
    thank you for the poem hannah... it brought me inspiration... hope you read this soon... cause that means i was third to reply.. not first like i was trying to be.

    my favorite thing about this poem was
    I'm so sorry I said something
    I never meant to make you mad
    Make you hit me
    I only wanted to be close to you
    keep writing...it's helping me as well
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by darkwisdom623 | [ Reply to This ]
      This brought back some memories that I wish it had not. I was in an abusive relationship once, I would always lie to myself and say, "Oh he only gets mad and hits me when he is drinking, but he does really love me." BULL! Someone who could be so cruel and unusual does not love you! People like this have a problem and wont stop unless they have serious help. If you do not get out of this relationship you are asking for more pain than you care to know about. It was a great peice of work because it is so real, but that is what also makes it scary. Please get out and dont go back to him no matter what he tells you, or how sorry he claims he is. LEAVE, LEAVE, LEAVE! Good luck and God bless you sweetie!
    *Amanda*
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by fortressofwords | [ Reply to This ]
      That brings me back... Damn good job of bringing back a blocked out piece of my childhood. It was blocked out for a reason you know. Anyway only a great writer could display such a courageous plea on paper for to share with us nice people here on eliteskills, and make me remember something. Good job.

    thank you -sinmore
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by sinmore | [ Reply to This ]


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