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    dots Submission Name: Washed Up (The Tsunami Prayer)dots
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    Author: Lady Tragedy
    ASL Info:    15/F/Not Where You Are
    Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 87/66/14
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 994
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    Description:
       This is dedicated to anyone impacted by the tsunamis in Asia. It is a prayer as-said by a young boy who lost his mother in the disaster.


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    God, are you mad at us?

    Daddy says Mommy's not coming home
    He says she's washed up with the sea
    But I don't understand
    She said she'd always be there for me

    God, are you listening?

    I want my mommy back
    So we can play hide-and-seek
    I have never seen my Daddy cry
    But now his tears are washed up on his cheek

    God, are you with her?

    Tomorrow is my birthday
    And then I will be seven
    I already feel wise
    'Cause I know Mommy's washed up, up, up...
    Washed up into heaven.




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      I like this one, I feel the same way about the tsunamis. You should add a little more to it so you can get more emotion into it. I was already shedding tears by the time I reached the part where you say 'God, are you listening?' I wish the world could see this poem . . . It would show that people really do have hearts . . .
    | Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by WindEmpress | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful. Absolutly beautiful. The last stanza especially captured my heart. Wonderful piece, wonderful words and an amazing flow. Lovely.
    | Posted on 2005-01-22 00:00:00 | by Emma_closes | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. This is wonderful. Very sad, yet beautiful. I think you did a wonderful job on this. The whole thing is so sad with so many people dieing, and I can't imagine how many children are feeling like this...but I do think god is there, and listening. wonderful poem!
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow what a wonderful thing you have written.

    I know being a guy im not suppose to have tears but this made my eyes watery.
    Well written I applaud you. I felt sad for this little boy.

    Peace and Harmony
    Shawn
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      well done very insightful and also good perceptiveness and style keep the good work up I to pray for those who were impacted by the Tsunami
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      My eyes got all teary. It so sad when its like little children speaking about there mom or dad thats in heaven. Its a real good way to keep someone reading the poem. my heart goes out to them. I love it
    | Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by Hazel eyes Jess | [ Reply to This ]


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