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Shadow Of The Girl I Used To B

Author: BCute
ASL Info:    30/F/MO
Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 1297 /1424 /373
Words: 159
Class/Type: Poetry /I am dead inside
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Should really pretty much explain itself.

Shadow Of The Girl I Used To B

In the corner- there’s a shadow,
A Shadow Of The Girl I Used To Be.
So bright, so young, so carefree.
Unused- hadn’t yet been jaded.

Below her- pressed up to the wall,
Is who I am now- the loathed me.
Curled up tight inside myself,
Blocking out the ever-harsh world.

The one that’s always kicked me down,
Over and over again- leaving me hurt.
Alone- ever, always crying, full of pain.
Eyes forever searching- scared of being.

Eyes wide open- heart closed, forever shut,
The shadow teasing, lurking, beckoning.
Asking me to come out and to please play,
At least to attempt to live to see another day.

Me- I just sink slowly back down the wall,
Sighing softly, standing up only to fall.
Listlessly leaning back- dying inside, trying,
To fall away from everything that’s happened.



Beneath The Shadow Of The Girl I Used To Be.

Submitted on 2005-01-09 23:05:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It sucks becoming something that you never asked to be.
I enjoyed this not one of your best but still good. Sorry had to be honest.

Peace and Harmony
| Posted on 2005-01-09 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
  Really nice write...If nice is the right word to use seeing as its so powerfully tearwrenching ...I think by now i can be classed as a fan ...luv your work
| Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]

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