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    dots Submission Name: Lickdots
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    Author: ARCHIE
    ASL Info:    37 YOA Male in Africa
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 90/126/40
    Words: 30
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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    dotsLickdots
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    Lick
    the light
    let it dribble
    ice cold
    diamonds
    down your throat
    sparkling your soul
    sold hard in cash and gold
    softened by the
    crisp raw
    light




    Submitted on 2005-01-10 06:15:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is really intetesting. I think you could say something else at the end in lieu of light (rays or something like that) in order to avoid repetition in such a minimalist piece. This has a surreal feel (Hey, I rhymed) to it. It's also sort of imagist too. It reminds me of Amy Lowell's work (I'm not a fan of Ezra Pound, so I won't bring up that comparison).
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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