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    dots Submission Name: Cape of Stormsdots

    Author: ARCHIE
    ASL Info:    37 YOA Male in Africa
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 90/126/40
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsCape of Stormsdots

    The old ships
    round the Cape of storms
    have gone to
    their resting place
    the seagulls
    chase their wings
    no more
    they flee from
    those ghosts
    in haste
    and wonder
    whats in their place
    there round the
    Cape of storms.

    Submitted on 2005-01-10 06:18:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this... althoug the "serious" section of this doesn't seem to fit... although it was short simple and sweet.. I enjoyed this...
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      I like that it is short, and the way it is put together works perfectly to me. It made me feel like I was back in a time of pirates don't know why. Good job
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by Nagow | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very good, but i think this would work just as well without the last two lines. This has an eerie feel to it that's nice. I really like the lines:

    the seagulls
    chase their wings
    no more
    they flee from
    those ghosts

    It makes me see this graveyard of ships with nothing around it (even in the sky). It really adds to to the atmosphere of this piece.
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      Because the poem is so short I don't feel there is a need to repeat "The Cape of Storms" on the last line. If you think its possible, maybe you could try expanding on some more of the images like "the seagulls chase their wings." I like a poem a like this that explains things without being direct.
    | Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by kanu | [ Reply to This ]

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