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    dots Submission Name: Scardots
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    Author: Nagow
    ASL Info:    20/f/Denmark
    Elite Ratio:    2.56 - 56/70/29
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsScardots
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    Slipped right through my fingers
    because of our fright
    why my mind lingers
    I don't know, this isn't right

    I had forgotten you
    but you locked me up
    when you wrote that you too
    didn't want it to stop

    strange how people are
    sporatic notes
    this pulsating scar
    ripped up with ropes

    loneliness strangles me
    a fear of inimacy
    I hope this won't always be
    my lingering fantacy




    Submitted on 2005-01-10 13:30:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was an okay poem check your spelling though some slight errors nothing really big other than that i really liked it.
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by Demon__666 | [ Reply to This ]


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