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    dots Submission Name: The Keydots
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    Author: wildcatchamps
    ASL Info:    33 Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 47/57/34
    Words: 367
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 568
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    Bytes: 2117



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    dotsThe Keydots
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    Rain on the window covers the trace
    Of all the tears that I've had to waste
    And now I'm missing you so
    And I won't let you go away
    Stain on the desktop where coffee cups lay
    And memories of you forever will stay
    And the scent of your perfume
    And the smile on your face will remain

    And I never gave up hope when things got me down
    But I just bit on my lip and my face began to frown
    Because that was just my pride and I've nothing else to hide
    And now the way is clear and all I want to say is

    All of my life the doors have been closed now
    And all of my dreams have been locked up inside
    But you came along and captured my heart, girl
    You're the key to my life
    Yeah

    Year after year, was blaming myself
    For what I'd done, just thought of myself
    I know that you'll understand
    This was all my own fault, don't go away

    And I never gave up hope when things got me down
    But I just bit on my lip
    And my face began to frown
    Because that was just my pride and I've nothing left to hide
    And now the way is clear and all I want to say is

    All of my life the doors have been closed now
    And all of my dreams have been locked up inside
    But you came along and captured my heart, girl
    You're the key to my life
    Yeah

    Girl you know that I feel for you
    There isn't nothing that I wouldn't do
    Stop the thunder and the pouring rain
    You're the one that's going to stop the pain
    Girl you know that I feel for you
    There isn't nothing that I wouldn't do
    Stop the thunder and the pouring rain
    Listen to me can't you hear what I say

    All of my life the doors have been closed now
    And all of my dreams have been locked up inside
    But you came along and captured my heart, girl
    You're the key to my life




    Submitted on 2005-01-10 13:40:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Your lyrics sound as if they should be a song and I think you should try to sing them just to see. They sound as they should bea rock song. I think you did a very good job on these and I can tell that you put all of your heart into them.
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by Chelsea | [ Reply to This ]


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