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The Mask


Author: painofthanatos
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Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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the ladder refrence...it's how i've always described my life. Sometimes you're on the top of your ladder, sometimes you just can't reach it.
As for the rest of it, it kind of explains my life and the one who looks past it


The Mask



Every morning I wake up
I wipe the tears from my pillow
And I grab the make-up off my desk
I take the black eyeliner and all the other crap
And I smoother the truth
The make-up composes my mask
By the time the first bell has rung
I’ve given half a million hugs
And a smile stains my face
I try my hardest to be what you want
What you need
So desperately I attempt to be strong
I cling desperately to my ladder
Striving to stay on top
You need me to be strong
So here I am
Please don’t look so deeply into my eyes
The mask only goes so far
I don’t want you to see the truth
I don’t want you to see the lies
I want you to see what I show you
See the smile? See the joy?
No you can’t borrow my hoodie
I’m not hiding anything – leave me alone
I’m happy you see, I’m smiling
Why would I smile if I wasn’t happy?
How could I smile if I wasn’t happy?
Please just leave the mask alone
I like the way it looks
It looks pretty, it looks perfect
It looks like everything I want to be
It looks like everything I’m not…




Submitted on 2005-01-10 13:45:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Having officially read all your posts, I think this is my favorite.

I’m happy you see, I’m smiling
Why would I smile if I wasn’t happy?
How could I smile if I wasn’t happy?
Please just leave the mask alone
I like the way it looks
It looks pretty, it looks perfect
It looks like everything I want to be
It looks like everything I’m not…

And, I think that chunk is my favorite part.

~Birdie~
| Posted on 2006-04-21 00:00:00 | by MaeBirdie | [ Reply to This ]
  Tears...it brought tears to my eyes. Hmm, must be getting sensitive in my old age. This has excellent emotion in it, and I loved the way you wrote it.
You need me to be strong
So here I am
Please don’t look so deeply into my eyes
The mask only goes so far
I don’t want you to see the truth
I don’t want you to see the lies
I want you to see what I show you

These are my favorite lines. Because no matter how hard we try to hide the truth, it's there behind the mask, behind the eyes. Great poem. My only hello is you wrote smoother and it should be smother.
| Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by Dark_Dancer | [ Reply to This ]
  It's always good to know that one is not alone with these feelings then on the other hand it makes me sad that there is someone else out there that feels the same.

"please don't look so deeply into my eyes
the mask only goes so far" BRA-VO!
| Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  like an onion. layer upon layer you try to seek the core, only to find the hell i hide* this is how i feel many days. no one can get deep inside my layers, they are mine and sometimes i wish more people would respect that! this was an amazing write and i just love it***
| Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
  ACKK. OMGGGG, I LUBBB THIS POEM. I wrote one just like it a LONGGGG time ago. But anyway, yours is better. :)) I love it! Can I add it to my favorites? Hm... how DO I add it? Uckk, I hate being new here on this complicated site...
Anyway, I LOVE IT! I can relate so wellll. Mannn, I'm getting tired of telling people that, but its not my fault everyone writes about crap I'm going through.
=P Lol, just kidding.
But, I still love this! Okay, as soon as I figure out how to add favorites, believe woman, I will. :)
Keep it upp.
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by GiveMeTheGun | [ Reply to This ]
  wow... I don't even have words... pure pain and love put into this... courtney it's no suprise you wrote this...wow. everything ws in this emotion and witsism and such...
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
  This is REALLY good. It describes so much. I'm not a girl and I don't know about the makeup thing, but I do know about the wearing a mask. and I know what it feels like to put on a show for people, so they don't suspect anything... def. going on the favs list...
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by Darkest Flaw | [ Reply to This ]
  [[And a smile stains my face]]

i really like that contrast and what it represents. i also like how the make up is your mask.

[[Why would I smile if I wasn’t happy?
How could I smile if I wasn’t happy?]]

that part is what i think every day of my life when im around the asswipe who treated me like [censored]. [censored] [censored]er [censored] him. hehe i just want to see how many [censored]s theyll give me, not that i dont mean all of that. anyway i like this poem a lot and i think that the conversational tone brings out the monotony of your day and sadness. dont worry courtney, be happy :-( :-)
sophie
| Posted on 2005-01-21 00:00:00 | by sudie | [ Reply to This ]


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