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    dots Submission Name: New Yeardots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       i wrote this one today. weird shit happennin' but oh well. had a bad start but "HEY" any way i'm back from break and be on more now. like before. missed you guys!!
    love tina

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    dotsNew Yeardots

    It is a new year,
    And still I am dying.
    Still I am lying,
    And still I am crying.
    Still I just sit here,
    Watch clouds passing by.
    Why is life like this?
    I cry and I sigh.
    Why does this happen?
    Why am I confused?
    Why when I cry,
    Are they so amused.
    They walk around,
    They say to choose.
    Then they get mad,
    When I choose to refuse.
    This new year,
    No difference from last.
    I still can't move,
    My feet stuck fast.

    Submitted on 2005-01-10 13:52:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was a piece that asks - so what new year - nothing is new. It was full of a lot of questions but ones that only you can answer or change, like JimmweiZero offered - positive
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    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Another nice expression, this makes me feel empathetic towards you, almost like I know how you feel. I hate the feelings of confusion, chaos, being trapt and loneliness...and those are the emotions I felt when I read this. Not that I didn't like the poem...Cuz I did, it was nice...SAM
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by Samuel Bielz | [ Reply to This ]
      Tis' a very remote feeling I get when I read this. Truly there is nothing NEW ABOUT MY New Year, so the personal connection, leaves me at a shock for words.

    And that doesn't happen often...

    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by River | [ Reply to This ]
      I found this quite unexpected to be honest. New year should bring changes and positive thinking, thats why I was surprised when I saw 'depressed' as the genre.

    However, the feelings you got across the reader were great but the about 'they' and how 'they' are amused, is a little confusing because the beginning of the poem is all about you. Anyway, if it makes sense to the reader then that's the only thing that matters.

    I'm sorry you couldn't get on but it's good to see you back. What would be even better is a slightly more positive frame of mind, you can't imagine the gates you open by doing that...

    | Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]

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