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    dots Submission Name: Remember Lustdots
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    Author: reveries
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 54/74/23
    Words: 110
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       hmm....I had the line "Remember Lust" in my head and I was thinking about how lust is so much easier then love, so easy to fall into, and hold on to....I've been hurt by love and I'm starting to let go of it....lust on the other hand...


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    dotsRemember Lustdots
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    Remember lust
    lush kisses and wet fingers
    teen girls and
    men
    dancing in
    worlds where
    age doesn't exsist
    and lust
    drip
    drop
    from every smile
    every thought
    every...
    Remembering the way
    love hurts
    and lust
    so easy
    so physical
    Remembering
    hurt
    and pain
    that's love
    No
    Remember lust




    Submitted on 2005-01-10 16:32:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really liked this dont' let other put you down like guys they are [censored]s and immune to nothing lol i really enjoyed it tho so great write!
    | Posted on 2005-01-27 00:00:00 | by grinninggashes | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this. For a long time i thought that love equalled pain and sometimes i still think that why when my heart gets broken. Lust gets me in the same amount of trouble but hell its always so exciting and fun that i forget. Now if i could only have both...
    | Posted on 2005-01-26 00:00:00 | by Ann | [ Reply to This ]
      wow....the word positioning is wrong....very very wrong...crap!....if you wanna see it how it should be visit http://reveries-of-time.diary-x.com ....yeah....I need to fix this....word position is very important in my poetry *weeps*....no it doesnt work there either...ok...if you care enough to know how it should be....email me and I'll send you the poem the way it should be.... geeky_poet@yahoo.com
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by reveries | [ Reply to This ]
      contact eggman and he'll help you reformat this. Edit your title so the spelling is correct Then chand drip, drop to drip drops for the sake of grammer. Consider adding elipses after so physical to give it credence as an unfinished or interupted thought. I realize different word positioning will change some of the understanding a bit but it doesn't make too much difference to the grammer probs.
    jan
    PS going to check the other version too.
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      okay I checked out the diary too and see that it's much the same. My suggestion there would to be to change the font color. it's extremely hard to see when it passes over the moon, but the page looked great otherwise. There are several people here wh can teach you how to make the words align correctly. I think there's even a link page from your account to tutor you for this site.
    jan
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by jaycee | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey there. I understand how you feel. Love does hurt. It hurts immensely. But lust isn't really a good thing to turn to. Lust is a catalyst for abuse. And not a violent kind of abuse. More a sexual kind of abuse. I do hope that you find real love, so that you might see it's beauty and relish in it's delight.

    The poem is nicely written. Is that title supposed to read "Rember Lust" or "Remember Lust" ? I did check out the diary version. I love that background (I'm an astronomy nut). Anyhoo...beautiful writing. I'd love to read more.
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by Juliets_dagger | [ Reply to This ]
      thanks all for your comments.....I'm working on a new layout for all my sites...ones that arent so hard to read....all my sites are made so people who use anything besides IE can see them correctly....I'm not a big fan of IE, though I guess I should keep in mind that many people still use it...again....thank you all
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by reveries | [ Reply to This ]
      i feel sorry for ya...true love is worth so so much ...its not "love" that hurts you in the way you speak..it is "fake love" ..true love lives to give..anything less can be called "love" but it really isn't. true love lasts forever and is beautiful! I hope that you come to see this...i have struggled with fake love...seeing what it does to people, and I turned instead to true love...lasting forever through song and storm! If you are interested in another view..even if just to know that there is another view..check out some of my love poems...like "forever"
    ..I dont want to offend ya...yo i really care that's all.
    peace...
    -shawnothan
    | Posted on 2005-01-10 00:00:00 | by Shawnothan | [ Reply to This ]
      Love sucks. And, Lust just screws it up. And, it just,both of them confuse the heck outa me. I totally get what you're saying, I just don't know how to put my comment into words that you'll understand. Just know, that I understand it, get it, relate to it. Thanks for posting.
    ~BCute
    | Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]


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