The Musical Infant by serpentarius

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Submission Name: The Musical Infant dots

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Author:	serpentarius
ASL Info:	18/m/Melbourne
Elite Ratio:	3.62 - 97/80/23
Words:	109

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	500
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Description:
Ever seen those pianists go wild on the ivory keys? *shivers*

The Musical Infant dots

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This morning, I ate my piano etude.
As I practiced, notes dropped off the page
suspended in air by their strings,
the ringing of their own black bells
falling into me.
My selfish tongue lapped up each
E flat in ecstasy and Schumann
watched from above,
tasted his melodies too,
pretended it was the first time.
Tonight, notes pore out from
skin in rainbow waves.
Musical infections reproduce into
symphonies one, three, five,
out of my fingers in black F sharps
white C harmony, until
I give birth right there on the stage
crescendo allegro coda
silence broken by applause--
greedy hands of the modern music lover.

Submitted on 2005-01-11 13:44:36 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is great, right from the opening lines when you eat your piano etude! i play the piano, but probably not as well as you do. this is so surreal and just makes the music come alive on the page. i'm going to tuck this away in my favs.

notes dropped off the page
suspended in air by their strings,
the ringing of their own black bells
falling into me.

loved this part the best! great way to describe musical notes. i love it.
| Posted on 2005-03-11 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
  What I really like about this is that there is no way that you're not at least able to read music, and more than likely play some musical instrument. I really like how you can go into detail describing every little thing, whether it be a simple note name, or the name of a composer, or even something more than that. Amazing writeup!
| Posted on 2005-03-14 00:00:00 | by zyllion | [ Reply to This ]
  This is excellent. I love the surreality of this.

This morning, I ate my piano etude.
As I practiced, notes dropped off the page
suspended in air by their strings,
the ringing of their own black bells
falling into me.
My selfish tongue lapped up each
E flat in ecstasy and Schumann
watched from above,
tasted his melodies too,
pretended it was the first time

The surrealism is gorgeous. I write a lot of poems in which my words are personified, so I like that you do that to music. I have synesthesia, so I can actually taste sounds and stuff (mostly they're linked to corresponding visuals though). In "Tonight, notes pore out from/skin in rainbow waves," I think you mean pours. Pores are the openings in the skin, and pours is the verb. I love how you say you give birth on the stage too. I think about my poetry and visual art that way. Thanks for directing me toward this.
| Posted on 2005-03-04 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  the emotional undertones behind the need to personalize the past and putting a little of yourself in it is a perfect outlet for an artistic harvest. really amazing how it is often hard to do yet, if successful, it blows you away.

using the word "infant," in my opinion, is perfect.

in a sense, children are born swirling in tabula rasa and for one to consider it a part of their growth to take things and remake them is a good observation of true development.

or perhaps infant is just a word you used to capture your love for the musical avenue and how it enhances you... helps you grow... gives you structure and all that [censored].

one can never be too sure.

anyway, really good piece.

i enjoyed it.

keep writing.
| Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
  A-freakin' -mazing. I"m assuming you are a musician. I play trumpet, Upright Bass, and guitar and this poem has captured the joy and connection that one feels onstage performing. great piece bro. Salude
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by cainboy | [ Reply to This ]
  This is very, very clever. Am not musical at all so cannot fully appreciate it in the way that others can but think it as an excellent piece of poetry. Well done!
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by Poetofsorts | [ Reply to This ]
  this was pretty damn cool and i don't even play an instrument or now much about composing music. You can truly feel your uplifting spirited soaring in this poem,excellent write
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  this is great! i love the beginning of this-"this morning I ate my piano etude." excellent! this poem is a delectable show of how true musicians feel about their music! well done!

IHS,
shuford
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by littleshuford | [ Reply to This ]

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