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I'm Happy!


Author: painofthanatos
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I wrote this poem about 15 minutes ago because I was oh so joyous and I was in such a state of shock I wrote a poem about it... hehe


I'm Happy!



I’m so happy
I thought I’d forgotten this feeling
But here it is again
The smiles, they’re real
It’s amazing

And although I know it’ll fade
I know everything dies
I’m basking in the glory
I’m basking in the not-alone-lyness

I’m looking forward to talking to people
I’m excited about doing homework
Because I know the future is still there
It’s waiting for me

And all of this came from a phone call
On miserable phone call
Filled with disorders and depression
Led to so much joy

It’s sick and demented
But I’m happy
Oh I’m happy
Smell the roses
Kiss the tiger lilies
Life is back in this heart




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  I thought it was a good poem, good job expressing your happiness. Writing advice, not much. In the second stanza you wrote:
I’m basking in the glory
I’m basking in the not-alone-lyness
I think you should have replaced one of the 'basking's with another word, but that's just my humble opinion.
| Posted on 2005-02-03 00:00:00 | by elitegundam | [ Reply to This ]
  wow! i felt the happiness in the poem even though i'm not exactly sure why you were happy! this poem just was somehow so extremely happY!?!?!? keep up the good work!
| Posted on 2005-01-31 00:00:00 | by codysangel | [ Reply to This ]
  It''s amazing what a phone call cn do hu? So glad to see you happy and I surely hope you stay that way for life is just too short to be sad.
Good write and stay happy!
Doc
| Posted on 2005-01-19 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
  Isn't it wonderful to be happy! You're right, it's kinda disgusting when you look back at how you've behaved being happy. It's almost abnormal... sadly... What in the phone call made you this happy? Please add more to that... It would better express the happiness, I think.
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by musaXX | [ Reply to This ]
  please let the reader know what the phone call was about,please ,please please,lol

It very kool to read a poem about being happy after a zillion I want to kill or cut myself poems.

I love this stanza so so so much:

It’s sick and demented
But I’m happy
Oh I’m happy
Smell the roses
Kiss the tiger lilies
Life is back in this heart

the yo- yo affect here worked greatly.

very good write

keep writing and I will keep reading
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  Your poem shows exactely how excited you are to be happy and I'm glad that you could be this happy after being, it seems, very unhappy. Something that might improve it would be telling more of what makes you so happy that you think that this happiness is sick and demented.
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by Chelsea | [ Reply to This ]
  Its good that your happy. Everyone wants that feeling. Right now I feel happy, but I dont think as much as you. LoL I this alot.

And although I know it’ll fade
I know everything dies
I’m basking in the glory
I’m basking in the not-alone-lyness
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
  Im glad you're happy, but I'm sorry for how it came about. You're poem is nice. I most enjoyed the second and last stanza.

Rain
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by Rain | [ Reply to This ]
  Ding Ding !...so cute and fresh ...Only thing i found in it was "On miserable phone call" ...Should be probebly "One miserable phone call " ? ..But other then that ..(which is nothing anyway ...we all do it) I thought this was great and i hope your mood can cling for a while
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
  wait til you get the phone bill...lmao just kidding, what a contrasting poem, and the ending definitely left one thinking, hey but if you're happy, that's all that matters...Peace
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
  nice twists in this poem! in the fourth stanza, it takes an interesting turn, which ends the poem in a completely different way than I thought it would end. cool poem, and nicely done!

IHS,
shuford
| Posted on 2005-01-11 00:00:00 | by littleshuford | [ Reply to This ]


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