Description: I wrote this because I was just thinking about reality, and how most people can't face it. In terms of feedback, I just want to see if anyone got a message. Basically, tips, ideas, etc..
The fire of reality -------------------------------------------
The flames whip above a dirty campfire
No one's observing it's beauty
The curse is alive and burning
The curse of reality
It's so incredible it's haunting
Something so simple can steal your breath
And stain your memories
Can you still escape this?
Can this fire still be put out?
Your lying to yourself now
Let one last scream let loose
for reality has arrived.
I think that it does seem to have a second meaning. I dont know exactly what it is but there just seems to be something else there. Any ways I think its a good poem and I like it.
Well it has no second meaning like all the great poems have but the original and one and only meaning that you put on it is great. I loved it. Frankly, if you weren't my sister I'd probably say I love you.
I really like this! :) I think this is something you can build on. You have great images! I think the last line takes away from the poem a little: for reality has arrived. But reality is present, it's just that you wish to escape it: the curse of reality.
I enjoyed this write but as for meaning...well, taking a philisophical view would be like lining one hundred mirrors upside down. Did I get a message? Sure, but certainly the message will be different for everybody because reality is not a constant....good write.
Submission Name: The fire of reality
