My special place by Writer Chic

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Submission Name: My special place dots

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Author:	Writer Chic
ASL Info:	15/F/at my house
Elite Ratio:	4.83 - 100/101/26
Words:	102

Class/Type:	Poetry/Longing
Total Views:	546
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	685

Description:
This poem is really about my special place, it's not exactly detailed, but anyway have a go at it

My special place dots

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My special place,
is filled with roses and daffodils
and fields of violets and daisies.

My special place
smells morning fresh,
At any time of the day.

My special place,
has a night sky of velvet blue,
with stars that twinkle in coruscation.

My special place,
has a sun that shines brightly during the day,
revealing the cavernous space of intricacy.

My special place,
has a unique fulfilment
that makes me feel happy and replenished

I sit down, wondering,
Just how lucky I was.
To have that special place

Submitted on 2005-01-11 22:57:32 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Oooh wow what a SAGACIOUS piece..This is one of the most beautiful writings I have ever read that celebrates...wonder, appreciation, nature, paradise and more..You beautifully painted the scenery for us with your beautiful colours and I could vividly see that...I am assuming that you might be remeniscing on the beautiful landscape in Zim...This is one of those writes that literally takes one's breath away...I loved the flow of the piece...There's so much syncronity and you choose beautiful words to converse the wonder for us..This was such a captivating write..It has this purification element to it...Your use of imagery is so meticulous...I loved this one...A beautiful write...Be happy..Nobantu
| Posted on 2005-09-06 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]
  Well; you tricked me there!! I thought that this is going to be another longing poem discussing the same usual subject, eaither break up, travelling or any of that stuff but that wasn't it! At all!

I really liked the idea of the poem, it is new and innovative (at least to me)!! I really like innovative ideas specially when they are good like this one, I liked the idea of the "special place", I think that each and every single one of us has his own special place and you talked anout yours beautifully.

The poem was well written with no spelling mistakes (I didn't find any), which is a very good thing because spelling mistakes take alot from the beauty of any poem and you succeeded in avoiding that here.

I just have a comment on the third line in the second stanza, saying;

"At any one time of the day"

I just can't find a reason for "one" here!! I mean "At any time of the day" not "At any one time of the day"!!

The title is well chosen "My Special Place", and captures the attention of the readers, it captured mine, and also the description was good and simple too.

You described that special place well but used some cleche words to do that but I can't deny that it turned out well in the end.

Anyway, I hope that you find my comment somehow helpful to you, and I'll end up my comment saying; Good luck and keep it up.
| Posted on 2005-07-18 00:00:00 | by Yousef | [ Reply to This ]
  I thought this was a sweet kind of poem.. I fell deep into it. Its a nice place to be.. I wish I could live there... You described the place, so refreshing.

My special place,
is filled with roses and daffodils
and fields of violets and daisies.

It sounds like a place where everyone would want to live..
I dont have anything to change about it

Good JOb
stephanie
| Posted on 2005-03-05 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
  what a beautiful place you have indeed, so many people wished they could have a place like your. ty for sharing your special place.

My only suggestion on this poem is: take out the word at in the second stanza, you don't need it and it sounds better without it.

Good write, I can see your improving with each poem I read.

keep writing and I will keep reading
| Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  and here i am telling you how thankful i am that such people are willing to share their special place. i find that it's not entirely otherworldly but sufficient in healing frail souls. hope i can sit here for awhile.

nah screw it... i'll just go back to my place and stand on my head. my presence tends to violate places like this.
| Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
  you are really good at this your poem rocks i think this poem had the most detail i have ever seen i could acctually picture your special place
| Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by PlayPunk924 | [ Reply to This ]

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