I personaly feel that the quality of comments has dropped dramatically. Ah I suppose it cannot be helped.
Welcome back my friend. It has been many days since I have seen you here.
This piece has erotic undertones but they are overshadowed by a deafening voice. A voice who is calling out to something or someone. Giving in to them or it. A shout into the darkness that says, " I am here, take me and do what you will."
It leaves the reader asking a simple question...who or what?
I guess it is the question that drives us, perhaps it is the engine that drives this poem. The question never meant to be answered.
Your writing always made me think. This is no exception.
this was reallly kool it shows you really care about someone and that you have great talent you did really good on this and i think you should continue to keep on writing because you did really good on this its descriptive and shows how much you love someone and want to be with them
I like it a lot. It is romantic, but I couldn't help and sence a bit of tormenting anguish and pain? Am I totally off, or am I making it mean what I want it to mean, or am I right? Anything? Whatever, but I think overall this was a good piece. Joyfully, Darin