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    dots Submission Name: Soddomdots
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    Author: ARCHIE
    ASL Info:    37 YOA Male in Africa
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 90/126/40
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1002
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 572



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    dotsSoddomdots
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    Just another sinfull day
    suicide and ritual sex,
    murder, rape and mayhem.

    All in the news
    and children play
    in soddom

    See the ambulance rush by
    to feed on teenage wisdom
    cutting flesh cause so bereft
    of reason to keep living

    All in the news
    and children play
    in soddom

    parents throw babes in the trash
    life is worth no ransom
    pity us
    that live so long

    All old news
    and children die
    in soddom




    Submitted on 2005-01-12 01:03:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well a very impressive piece of work not as the standard of the ones before because its different but still its a great piece of work.. keep it up Archie.. good work
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]


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