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    dots Submission Name: GRRR!!!!!!!!dots
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    Author: lost_and_forgotten
    ASL Info:    17/f/Indiana
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 45/55/33
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Misc/Angry
    Total Views: 1454
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 464



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       POed if you read my last submit disregard it i hate him!!!!!


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    dotsGRRR!!!!!!!!dots
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    Tears form behind my eyes
    But I don't want to be known as the one who cries
    Over a guy, I never needed him anyway
    I can get a better guy any day
    Youre not that great, your just a jerk
    I told you what i was feeling and you just made a smirk
    And ignored me completely, like it was a game
    At this point, I don't know who to blame
    Mostly you, but them as well
    Well, just scerw it, see ya in hell




    Submitted on 2005-01-12 09:03:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this piece because you stick to 'hating' on the guy that dissed you. Many times we write, "Oh I shouldn't like you, you are song wrong." then a few stanzas later say "I love you." So I was glad you made a declaration and stuck to it in this piece. It sucks major when a guy acts like this. Jerks! UGH. Flaunt yourself around him and show him what he's missing but don't go running back if HE wants to get together THIS time. Good piece. :)
    -blt
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      hey that was awesome!
    lol i loved the ending
    i aslo loved the rythem in it it had a good flow
    well keep it up
    ununderstood
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by UNunderStood | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know if this was supposed to make me smile but I did. The end was great, like you suddenly were like, ah who cares anyway. Maybe I am loony but anyways I really liked this. Very nice.
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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