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    dots Submission Name: Emptiness of the Worlddots
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    Author: AnointedPoetess
    ASL Info:    22/Fe/MN
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 127/178/49
    Words: 993
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This descibes the emptiness of life without Gods love. Hope you all enjoy and are blessed by it.


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    What matters most in the world around me,

    Especially if I loose sight of God and His many gifts He has given me,

    In my eyes the world would be nothing but mere emptiness,

    Within the beings of every woman, man, and child,

    While they search the world frantically upside down and inside out,

    But still missing the only one that has importance,

    Yes, we humans are a small part of it because we bring significance in one another's lives in varies ways,

    Only for a limited time before we hurt, mess up, or leave one's life with a big tear or mark left on it,

    That reminds them daily of the hurt or pain another caused them,

    So the world is never ending in a long look for something lasting,

    Which just happens to be the God of this entire universe,

    Named Jesus Christ and His place and importance in each one's life is what should matter in the world we live in at the present moment,

    Everyone needs to hear about the real love of God before it is to late,

    Knowing in my heart that the simple message will touch the very core of everyone who is oppressed, distressed, and in strong agony of any sort,

    Through His eyes we are pricesless possessions of high value, each a prince or princess whose love for us is the greatest of all time, never ending, and life changing,

    So this out of His many promises we can take as true that His love for us is awesomely strong, never failing, and always engulfing in and on our whole beings to change us into people of His image,

    Awaiting sweet life in eternity with Him for ever more with the one who first loved us and loved us the most,

    With His flawless, perfect, and pure love ever imagined or ever before seen in the corruptible, evil, deceivable, place called earth.

















































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































































    Submitted on 2005-01-12 09:03:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It seems like a first draft of something with substance. If it was a room it needs to be laid out with a bit more interior decoration.
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by kanu | [ Reply to This ]
      I like how honest, sincere, and straightforward you were in approaching this subject...it came across as very powerful, and Ii really enjoyed the read! It was readable to me, but I think that some people might get the message better with a little re-formatting...just a suggestion. All in all though, this was an awesome write! Thanks for sharing...it was a great message...Have a great day!
    -Shawnothan
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by Shawnothan | [ Reply to This ]
      the message here is a beautiful one. i think most people could get something out of it. my only suggestion is that you read it over one more time yourself. there are a few spots where the flow becomes irregular and where the sentences themselves become confusing. over all, it's a good write. just watch those spelling mistakes. you don't want something like that taking away from your message.
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by painfullyme | [ Reply to This ]
      Very deep and very expressive. Full of emotion. This was a very serious intellectual piece. You gave a bit point of view here. You could change the spacing a little bit. But I don't think that the piece is bad as it is right now. Good write sweetie!
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      i really enjoyed this poem. i just thing you should space it out more in order for it to be more interesting and easier to read.
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by shayla8911 | [ Reply to This ]


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