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    dots Submission Name: Emotions.dots
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    Author: kellz
    ASL Info:    25/F/England
    Elite Ratio:    2.97 - 122/148/49
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 457
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 453



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       i made this one up for my brothers school work


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    dotsEmotions.dots
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    Running through meadows with you by my side.
    Running through time is this heaven have i died .
    When im down you lift me up when i am ill you care.
    When im higher than heaven you are there.

    Holding hands along the beach destiny is just out of reach.
    Sand between our toes is this heaven nobody knows.
    When you laugh my world is compleat.
    You make me smile though i know it won't last forever




    Submitted on 2004-03-25 12:06:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this, the flow was a little hard to follow, maybe break it in a few different places, but its really good other than that, I like it, even though your little brother is a cheater! lol
    | Posted on 2004-03-25 00:00:00 | by ViCiOuSWrItEr | [ Reply to This ]
      some lines are slightly clichéd but it's a good poem. like Darkfairy said it's soothing. the last line is great. it should be complete instead of compleat, but that's only a little mistake.
    | Posted on 2004-03-25 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]



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