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    dots Submission Name: What I Couldn't Saydots
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    Author: wildcatchamps
    ASL Info:    33 Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 47/57/34
    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsWhat I Couldn't Saydots
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    If she only knew
    What I knew but couldn't say
    If she could just see
    The part of me that I hid away
    If I could just hold her in my arms again
    And just say "I love you"
    But she's gone away, maybe she'd stay
    If she only knew

    If she could just feel
    What I feel here in my heart
    She'd know it was real
    Pure and true right from the start
    But I'm just a man who didn't understand
    What she was going through
    But she's gone away, maybe she'd stay
    If she only knew

    And how, how did I let her go away
    Cause love, love is so easy to feel
    But the hardest thing to say

    If she could just see
    What I see when I close my eyes
    All that I dream
    Surely she would realize
    But like a fool I waited much too long
    To let her know the truth
    She's gone away, maybe she'd stay
    If she only knew




    Submitted on 2005-01-12 13:57:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i can relat to your poem. i love it. i feel the same way with my sister i miss you poem .i love the way you said if she only knew. you couldnt of putt it any better. ill read more of your poems.
    | Posted on 2005-01-22 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      Well now that is a love song!

    Well done...give it to her...truly...or sing it to her
    top of your lungs...doesn't matter if you can sing or not, tell her.
    I think has so much heart that not saying it loud and clear would be a waste of love...and that is the point...no?
    Not to waste that love any more...hmmm
    Good write...now I'm thinking...which is a good thing!
    Kelly
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]


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