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    dots Submission Name: One Moredots
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    Author: wildcatchamps
    ASL Info:    33 Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 47/57/34
    Words: 242
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 798
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    dotsOne Moredots
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    It's been a long time since you left me
    I didn't mean to make you cry
    I didn't mean to disappoint you
    I didn't mean to tell you lies
    And after all that we have been through
    Won't you let me tell you why?

    I didn't know how much I loved you
    Let me put my arms around you
    Living all these lonely nights without you
    Oh baby, can't we give it one more try?
    It's been a long time since I kissed you
    It always used to feel so good
    And if you knew how much I missed you
    You'd forgive me if you could
    And now that we have found each other
    Can't we give it one more try?

    I didn't know how much I loved you
    Let me put my arms around you
    Living all these lonely nights without you
    Oh baby, can't we give it one more try?
    And after all that we have been through
    Won't you let me tell you why?
    And now that we have found each other
    Can't we give it one more try?

    I didn't know how much I loved you
    Let me put my arms around you
    Living all these lonely nights without you
    Oh baby, can't we give it one more try?
    Oh girl, you know I love you
    I just want you to know
    Our love I'll always treasure
    So please just don't let me go




    Submitted on 2005-01-12 18:32:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Couldn't finish reading it it was so breakupy. I have heard it before. Sorry for being so meanbut I can't honestly critique it.
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by wordslinger | [ Reply to This ]


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