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    dots Submission Name: Cant Go Ondots
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    Author: wildcatchamps
    ASL Info:    33 Las Vegas
    Elite Ratio:    5.42 - 47/57/34
    Words: 308
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 645
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    Bytes: 1789



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    what can i do to show my love to you
    i'd face erormous pain, run through the wind and rain
    girl anything i'll do
    the smile on your face is like a joy that can't be placed
    it runs all over me, and takes a hold of me
    don't let it fade away
    cause i keep thinking about ya every night inevery way
    thinkin' to myself it might be too late
    it's gonna be real hard, i hope that i can take it
    i really don't know how i'm gonna make it

    i can't go on
    i can't go on without you
    what can i say to tell ya that i'm sorry
    the thing that i said can't be true oh lady
    my mind wasn't thinkin' when i let you
    walk out that door
    cause baby, i love you
    and you know it

    i'll try to find a way i can make it
    a way to go on without you here
    i'll time the hours till you come back
    and count the days till you appear
    it's gonna be real hard, i hope that i can take it
    i really don't know how i'm gonna make it
    i can't go on
    i can't go on without you


    now i agree that i never should have let you go
    and if i hurt you then i'm sorry, i didn't know
    i'll try to be a better man, the one you care for
    and if that's not enough just tell me i'll give you more
    so smoothly lay back is what i'm gonna do
    cause baby i can't go on without you

    i can't go on i need to feel your love
    i can't go on
    i need to feel your love
    just as simple as holding your hand
    i can't go on




    Submitted on 2005-01-12 23:01:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it's always hard to read lyrics without having any music to accompany them with, but this seemed to read real smooth, and i could almost hear an old-soul type thing going on, like the Temptations or Smokey Robinson. very nice, though sad and melancholy.
    | Posted on 2005-01-12 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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