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Torturous love


Author: runaway_poet
ASL Info:    21/m/limbo
Elite Ratio:    6.2 - 42 /41 /21
Words: 174
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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This was at first a song that i wrote when i met the queen but i turned it into a poem i know its not realy the mood i portray allot but it is somthing i wrought from an emotion i never felt before enjoy i apologize for the errors but i have limited amount of time


Torturous love



when i first saw you
i wanted to know you
you made me shine in all this dark
i became alive when i felt that spark
the spark of love and emotion
the is not crazy this notion
i know feel the poison of this potion
am i to feel this pain
am i to go insane
am i to feel the rain
or am i just a stain
i seem to be going through everything
i hate this sting!
my bells no longer ring
yeah my love shines brighter than the sun
when im with you my life has just begun
instead of ending
oh...what a sting
you shine light on everything
oh why my queen cant i be your king
but alas i am just a jester
that was made just to fester!
because im a fucking jester!
i know you feel the same i see it runing through your veins
why must we travel on seperate lanes
but when everything comes crashing down my love remains




Submitted on 2005-01-13 10:34:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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