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    dots Submission Name: Torturous lovedots
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    Author: runaway_poet
    ASL Info:    21/m/limbo
    Elite Ratio:    6.2 - 42/41/21
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 771
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 980



    Description:
       This was at first a song that i wrote when i met the queen but i turned it into a poem i know its not realy the mood i portray allot but it is somthing i wrought from an emotion i never felt before enjoy i apologize for the errors but i have limited amount of time


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    dotsTorturous lovedots
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    when i first saw you
    i wanted to know you
    you made me shine in all this dark
    i became alive when i felt that spark
    the spark of love and emotion
    the is not crazy this notion
    i know feel the poison of this potion
    am i to feel this pain
    am i to go insane
    am i to feel the rain
    or am i just a stain
    i seem to be going through everything
    i hate this sting!
    my bells no longer ring
    yeah my love shines brighter than the sun
    when im with you my life has just begun
    instead of ending
    oh...what a sting
    you shine light on everything
    oh why my queen cant i be your king
    but alas i am just a jester
    that was made just to fester!
    because im a fucking jester!
    i know you feel the same i see it runing through your veins
    why must we travel on seperate lanes
    but when everything comes crashing down my love remains




    Submitted on 2005-01-13 10:34:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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