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    dots Submission Name: Foolish Pillsdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Fuck it all
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    Description:
       THis is about an addiction, I started because of him, I would have stopped for him. My addiction isn't to the pills but to him, like half of the truth.


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    All these pills make me safe
    but they don't compare to you
    if you wanted, I would throw them away
    but you never asked me to

    what happened to calling it quits
    where is the determination I saw inside
    you never were through with this
    what a pretty lie

    I would've stopped with you
    never giving it a second thought
    but you faked this truth
    and we are back here at the start

    foolishly addicted
    fighting through the pain
    you don't believe it's there
    you don't see the game

    all these pills should go away
    they don't compare to you
    they only cause you pain
    you could've stopped if you wanted to




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      Awesome...I really liked this poem. Even the discription was poetic. It's no fair...sometimes i find myself getting jelouse of your skills...lol, j/k.
    Well i g2g, we are about to leave to go get you..

    ...farewell...
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      WOW this poem is really intense, i like how you have so many levels of meaning in this poem. You did a great job of describing both love and addiction. Your poem really made me think.
    | Posted on 2005-01-13 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]
      very very good. addiction to anything just sucks.Then ending kinda makes it sould like someone had died...or was dieing...or something. I really liked this!
    | Posted on 2005-01-13 00:00:00 | by MyKemicalfailur | [ Reply to This ]
      I was really taken back by this piece. I"m not sure if the message I got was the same as everyone because it sounds to me like something about someone dying. maybe that's just me but I really like this piece the rhyme scheme worked pretty well for this piece.. keep writting
    | Posted on 2005-01-13 00:00:00 | by bleedbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, very dark but very good. it sounds like a realationship gone wrong and i have a few of those so it reminds me of those but its an awsome peice of work!
    | Posted on 2005-01-13 00:00:00 | by lilghostyme | [ Reply to This ]
      Deep, and heartfelt. Maybe line 2+3 could say
    I would have thrown them all away
    But you never asked me to. I also wonder if if "you don't see the shame" would work better. This is a genuinely moving piece.
    | Posted on 2005-01-13 00:00:00 | by Double Happy | [ Reply to This ]


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