I was really taken back by this piece. I"m not sure if the message I got was the same as everyone because it sounds to me like something about someone dying. maybe that's just me but I really like this piece the rhyme scheme worked pretty well for this piece.. keep writting
Deep, and heartfelt. Maybe line 2+3 could say I would have thrown them all away But you never asked me to. I also wonder if if "you don't see the shame" would work better. This is a genuinely moving piece.