Description: While reading Twelfth Night for English, I discovered something quite valuable. I won't reveal what that is, it might not even be in the poem. I will say that my Defense in Disguise played the part of Sir Toby. Oh, and Melton is my Brit. Lit. teacher.
In British Literature,
I reapply my peach lip balm,
for whatever it might attract.
Stanford's Carmine-Red pencils
beckon me to draw,
to expose my soul on the desk.
But Melton is watching me,
wincing as I write notes
in Sharpie on my arm.
I hear him call my name
as I miss my lines from 'Twelfth Night'.
He cast me as Maria.
The small girl with a big heart.
It enthralls me, lightens
my promiscuous bad mood.
I am small, physically weak,
but my heart is strong,
and I have a bright mind.
Resisting Stanford's Carmine-Red
is no amazing accomplishment.
I give a dazzling smile while I
finish my lines,
and follow Sir Toby to his chambers.
I can so picture that whole scene in my head! It helps that you told me about it, but that's okay, lol. I can't believe it's 2nd semester, I'm going to miss health... Do I have any classes with you? I love my CD!!! See ya Monday!
you shouls be proud of yourself for putting so much of who you are in the piece. although it seems crowded... i'd love to keep looking. i'm not sure if i grasp the complete weight of what you were trying to imply... but i'm sure that whether or not people get it... they'd find it a strong piece as it can give others the feeling of change... motivation... some form of celebration regarding the aspects of life... and all the faulty [censored] that goes with it. i think you found something that you never knew you had or something you'd rather not share. more likely... you found yourself in the text...
sorry if i might have missed it... i've got a hang over.
i like the word choices here, i think you have a very well read and dedicated vocabulary. this is very personal and in context, but so are the very best poems ever written. it is enough that the word choices, whatever the subject, take you to the situation, and i think yours does that quite nicely. i like the way you put it. -Q