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    dots Submission Name: Penthesiliadots

    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       While reading Twelfth Night for English, I discovered something quite valuable. I won't reveal what that is, it might not even be in the poem. I will say that my Defense in Disguise played the part of Sir Toby. Oh, and Melton is my Brit. Lit. teacher.

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    In British Literature,
    I reapply my peach lip balm,
    for whatever it might attract.
    Stanford's Carmine-Red pencils
    beckon me to draw,
    to expose my soul on the desk.
    But Melton is watching me,
    wincing as I write notes
    in Sharpie on my arm.
    I hear him call my name
    as I miss my lines from 'Twelfth Night'.
    He cast me as Maria.
    The small girl with a big heart.
    It enthralls me, lightens
    my promiscuous bad mood.
    I am small, physically weak,
    but my heart is strong,
    and I have a bright mind.
    Resisting Stanford's Carmine-Red
    is no amazing accomplishment.
    I give a dazzling smile while I
    finish my lines,
    and follow Sir Toby to his chambers.

    Submitted on 2005-01-13 22:17:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good choice of words here, you've got a good vocabulary. You did this one quite nicely. I agree with AngelOutlaw, I can picture the scene painted in this poem as well. Good job.
    | Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      I can so picture that whole scene in my head! It helps that you told me about it, but that's okay, lol. I can't believe it's 2nd semester, I'm going to miss health... Do I have any classes with you? I love my CD!!! See ya Monday!
    | Posted on 2005-01-22 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
      you shouls be proud of yourself for putting so much of who you are in the piece. although it seems crowded... i'd love to keep looking. i'm not sure if i grasp the complete weight of what you were trying to imply... but i'm sure that whether or not people get it... they'd find it a strong piece as it can give others the feeling of change... motivation... some form of celebration regarding the aspects of life... and all the faulty [censored] that goes with it. i think you found something that you never knew you had or something you'd rather not share. more likely... you found yourself in the text...

    sorry if i might have missed it... i've got a hang over.

    still a fine piece.
    | Posted on 2005-01-13 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the word choices here, i think you have a very well read and dedicated vocabulary. this is very personal and in context, but so are the very best poems ever written. it is enough that the word choices, whatever the subject, take you to the situation, and i think yours does that quite nicely. i like the way you put it.
    | Posted on 2005-01-13 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]

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