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    dots Submission Name: Fairytale Crapdots

    Author: Chicool2
    ASL Info:    17/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 266/260/60
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       Aittle piece I wrote out on a fairytale that I want to become reality. I just wanted to explain myself...

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    dotsFairytale Crapdots

    I bet you have heard
    The fairytales
    Of the beautiful princess
    Possibly in line to rule Wales

    Well I can't help but detest
    That I hate the warm feeling
    We live in reality
    Where seeing is believing

    I want to believe this
    That future comes true
    But how can I be happy
    If my future consists without you

    The fairytale crap just sits on the hill
    With much love and affection
    I will not believe
    That I may have a succession

    I have been waiting too long
    Too many days and nights
    I can't take much longer
    To wait for the knight

    So make up your mind
    For the people and me
    If you choose not to
    Then please let me be....

    Submitted on 2005-01-14 08:30:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      excellent metre, and it tells a wonderful story. it seems you wait, like a vision, for the "one." or so i see it. almost transcendental in the flow, nice rhymes, nice rhythm. almost as if youre thumbing your nose at dreams within dreams if i may say so. very descriptive. most impressive.
    i liked it.
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]

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