I love the last line. Really good poem. Ben, you shall never cease to amaze me. The thing I loved most about this poem is the subtlety of it all. The passion, the drive, it paints a picture, but not too vividly. It's a good thing. You need to be published.
This makes me wish that my hair was still red. I love the imagry and the idea of pleasure reciprocated not just taken. Unlike TOrn SkiRT I found that this came off my tongue very easily and I enjoyed reading it aloud.
i love the imagery, and the choice of taste in calling it hot pink fractal explosion, it was very clever. i like the rhyme choices, simple but voluminous. the words you used were very visually pleasing and the metre was most invigorating. i found the work very enjoyable and funny. great job. -Q