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    dots Submission Name: Hot Pink Fractal Explosiondots

    Author: BenCollier
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 425/386/88
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsHot Pink Fractal Explosiondots

    Hot Pink Fractal Explosion

    The convergence of individuality
    Speaks volumes when done
    A pivotal coalescence
    Combined as one

    The donation of trust
    The reluctance of faith
    Combination as a receipt
    A gourmet dish to taste

    To indulge such pleasure
    And cast off refrain
    Gorge myself her benefaction
    And dispel refrain

    Pleasure obtained
    As willingly as given
    Continuance of desire
    Needless concern, Iím driven

    To reciprocate the passion
    Of her amorous emotion
    The ultimate finality
    A Hot Pink Fractal Explosion

    Submitted on 2005-01-14 10:59:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love the last line. Really good poem. Ben, you shall never cease to amaze me. The thing I loved most about this poem is the subtlety of it all. The passion, the drive, it paints a picture, but not too vividly. It's a good thing. You need to be published.
    | Posted on 2005-04-01 00:00:00 | by Areinaka | [ Reply to This ]
      This makes me wish that my hair was still red. I love the imagry and the idea of pleasure reciprocated not just taken. Unlike TOrn SkiRT I found that this came off my tongue very easily and I enjoyed reading it aloud.
    | Posted on 2005-01-16 00:00:00 | by greensnake | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the imagery, and the choice of taste in calling it hot pink fractal explosion, it was very clever. i like the rhyme choices, simple but voluminous. the words you used were very visually pleasing and the metre was most invigorating. i found the work very enjoyable and funny. great job.
    | Posted on 2005-01-14 00:00:00 | by TechnoticQ | [ Reply to This ]

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